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Spear of Longinus

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Spear of Longinus

Out gushed the water with blood spilling out
Above the crowd, as my Lord hung above
Doubt crossed my mind as my love I did doubt
Love is in my soul, yet I doubt my love

Spear in my hand and my Lord I did spear
Flood of my misery with a crimson flood
Fear in my soul for my Lord I do fear
Blood of the Lamb is the purest of blood

Will He condemn me; is it the Lord’s will?
Down in history the Centurion goes down
Skill with my spear took His life with such skill
Frown on my face reflects angelic frown

So the question is this; did I love Him so?
Woe fills my heart;  am I condemned to woe?

 

 

 

Author notes

 

  Form: Shadow Sonnet:

Shadow Sonnet created by Amera M. Andersen may be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 or 10 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary

 

History:

The lance is mentioned only in the Gospel of John ( 19:31–37 ) and not in any of the Synoptic Gospels . The gospel states that the Romans planned to break Jesus' legs, a practice known as crurifragium , which was a method of hastening the death during a crucifixion. Just before they did so, they realized he was already dead and that there was no reason to break his legs. To make sure he was dead, a soldier (extra-Biblical tradition gives this man the name Longinus ) stabbed him in the side. This act fulfilled another biblical prophesy concerning "messiah" ( Psalms 34:20 ).

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  • rinzurajan
    November 20
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    i liked the form...and since iambic pentamer is not a must its a nice way of writing a sonnet...!!!

    and loved the theme...its beautiful to read poetry based on the gospels...

    good luck




  • Black Narcissus gold member
    November 2
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    No wonder your screen pic is dancing after reading this.

  • dogpooper
    October 4, 2008

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    Decasyllabic

    Flows fine;not choppy.What is a Volta or Pivot? Iambic pantameter is nice.The begginning and ending of each line rhyme and it still flows well.


    • Amera gold member
      October 4, 2008
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      A Volta is common in sonnets. It usually tales place in L9. It's a change, turn or redirection in the story.


  • creationsfromheart
    January 16, 2008
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    this is filled with beauty of words and I love the form, awsome write.


  • BellaD
    December 21, 2007

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    Beautiful poem!

    Go with the gold, girl. What beauty and style! Shadow sonnet...I could learn a lot hanging out with you. Thank you for sharing this.


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    !!! Speechless

    I sit in dumbfound admiration for this sharing of what you write on Longinus.

    I am amazed and grateful. Let me keep reading before I type ought else.

    !!!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    December 10, 2007
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    forgot the "bunnies"


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    December 10, 2007
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    beautiful work here Amera, and well done! Congrats on yet another gold!


  • Melodies
    December 10, 2007

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    Oh, I am fainting blissfully!

    Truly, this poem is splendidly beautiful and your form reaches me in the center of my heart. Sweetly done, most profoundly.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Brilliant!!!!

    Amera,
    I cannot possibly add more that has not already been said. I know that this is your original form and I'm in "awe" and just amazed each time I read your Shadow Sonnets. Leaves me speechless
    I admire your talents sooooo much
    Take care,
    much love,
    Many blessings,
    happy Holidays,

    ~David~


  • captain howdy
    December 6, 2007

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    Ah, and thus one does wonder if Longinus felt regret for what he did after he did it? Everything happens for a reason, unfortunately, that means horrible things still happen. Wonderfully penned and powerful piece here!


  • islekine gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    I apologize.....

    I read, but did not comprehend...
    Very well penned.
    and thought out. Best wishes in the contest!
    *PEACE*

  • Eusebius
    December 6, 2007

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    bravo

    Ah, the Spear of Longinus, also, the Spear Of Destiny! An absolutely wonderful poem! So very excellent! I loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Desire gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Oh My Word!!

    Powerful piece You have penned Sweet One and love the form You used
    Magnificent tale You spun with Your words~
    taking the reader right there along for the ride!

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -throws confetti-
    Wooooooooooo Hooooooooooooo
    Love this!!

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Best wishes to You in all You do
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • good bye
    December 5, 2007

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    I love the way you tell his story, sometimes I feel like it's my story. This is the first of many of your poems I have read.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    Now this is the right time of year to come up with this poem because Christ died not just died but sufferde horrid tortue for our sins and thus was born Christianity. I like the form and the content


  • second-born
    December 4, 2007

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    This is fantastic...the poem would pierce deeply to any troubled soul and the ending couplet would surely make a grieving heart sleepless...I love your form...it's unique and beautiful...and maybe someday I could write a poem using that form too...hehehe


  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 3, 2007

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    Happy Birthday Amera,
    What I like about your poetry is that it teaches one so much. Thank You.
    Joe


  • Ithica silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    Such a wonder creation by you, the Shadow Sonnet. And its form heightens the drama of the subject you write about! Such a horrible slice of biblical history. But apparently necessary for our own salvation? Beautiful piece of poetry... Should be read by ALL !!!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    Girl I love this one, and I love you.
    This was powerful indeed and the form as always perfect.

    Tory


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    December 3, 2007
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    Beautiful form.


  • StarEyes
    December 3, 2007

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    Your skill with the sonnet never ceases to amaze me! this is just...WOW!!! Leaves me speechless!!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PerVirtuous
    December 3, 2007

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    Very powerful and deftly written. You are gaining mastery of the shadow sonnet. Bravo. More, more more.

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