blood drips in languid fire
wrist limp and extinguished
pools testify and live
body pale and downcast
all will die in our year
shatter and maim to live
Author notes
option iii
6 syllables per line/6 lines
A contest entry
- QUICKIE - Options 6 Lines 6 words/syllables per line... by VoltaicHypnosis.
333 points, ended December 5, 2007, 12 entries
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Comments
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excellent work good luck with it
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Good... this is quite well! While the last line loses a little sense, and both the last two lines have trouble connecting (for me) with the rest of the poem, this was a god read. Best of luck!
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thanks
since the poem deals with death, I felt the last two lines gave some conclusion and reason for the same . . !!
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Sad piece here. Good luck
Thanks for your comment
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