shes waiting in line
she hears the screams
with every one she gets closer
she knows what is coming
so her heart beats faster
life as she knows it is over
she wants to turn and run
but the gates are too strong
the monsters built them to hold her
shes next in line
shes pushed from behind
they creep up,and shackles now own her
click click click click
their pulling her quick
she falls then is hoisted up high
her bones are breaking
her body is shaking
shes hanging there wondering why
something approaches
slices her open
she sees her blood fall to the floor
shes feeling cold
shes gonna go
her nightmare is ending,but slow
the shackles release her,
but its not to free her
it hurts when she hits the ground
she is now dying
is she screaming or crying
only dead cows know the sound
now shes on your plate
doesn't she taste great
i cant believe that this is okay
don't be heroic
act like you don't know it
turn your head
look away
look away
Author notes
elenaliz
A contest entry
- What can you do? by Angel of Mercy.
385 points, ended January 30, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Animal Lover's Contest - in honor of Debilynn! by kareneisenlord.
900 points, ended March 20, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the AP members who care about animals by Cloudwalker.
550 points, ended April 25, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please be honest
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What an amazing write! Very vivid and moving.
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very moving and full of empathy. Wonderful write. I love the last stanza, it is powerful.
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intense
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bad ass, tcm is my favorite horror movie.. great write thank you for sharing your favorite with me. best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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The Whales Sonata [for#1 in this contest] new Received the gold for its phenomenol portrayal of whales mating in contrast with the bloody deaths that they suffer every day. I loved the build up of this daily conflict that whales must face; the dichotomy of their wonderful, peaceful paradise juxtaposed with the sad possibility of their demise if they continue to be hunted the way that they are. This poem won for category #1, as it picked out a cause and portrayed the daily life and struggle of these magnificent mammals of the sea who are the largest sea animal that exists today. The imagery was so real that I could feel, taste, see and touch it through the incredible description that the words created. A Mother at Heart This poem moved me beyond words in it’s a wonderful true story about a lioness’s antics in the way that she adopted baby antelopes instead of eating them. This story won the silver trophy not so much that it was written flawlessly but in how it genuinely and with heartfelt emotion described the life of this legendary lioness who was a Buddha incarnated as a lioness who adopted and sheltered abandoned antelopes even at her own expense. Thats Alright Mama. "My faithful dog Trooper stayed with me throughout my battles with cancer. That dog understood more than most humans do and always knew when" This won the bronze for the 3rd option for pet therapy because it told the true story of a dog who gave his/her master hope and purpose to go on, simply by being there for him/her and loving them unconditionally, as most animals have the capacity to do. There are many stories such as this, and I honored it with the bronze trophy because it portrayed a story that has transpired over and over many times in real life - that animals love and save people all the time and are capable of sentient emotions much the same as humans. I decided to award more honorable mentions than I initially listed. There were so many good entries, it was impossible to only give three honorable mentions. In fact, I wish I could give everyone an honorable mention. They were all amazing, and every one touched me in a special way. I cried, I laughed and I learned from all of you. Thank you my friend for all of your lovely entries and for caring about the animals! I want to take a moment to give special thanks to all of the people who helped with this contest; Thelordreigns, Dark Raven, silverstar2.0 and storiesuntold. Thank you to all of you for your great input and the time that you invested in this worthy cause. Also, I want to give special thanks and honor to the Animal Lover’s Group owner, Debilynn. This contest was done for her, in gratitude and love for keeping this group alive for us. We wish her happiness and well-being and I would like everyone to keep her in their prayers. She has been going through some health hurtles lately, and we hope for her speedy recovery. Do I Deserve This? A very well-written and telling poem about how much dogs suffer who are kept in miserable conditions, such as puppy mills, for dog fighting, even for being eaten! It was so sad how it adeptly portrayed that they go to sleep each night dreaming for a better life. [ f ] [ a ] [ c ] [ t ] [ o ] [ r ] [ y ] For pointing out the atrocities of factory farming and that animals endure unbelievable suffering because they feel like we do. Adopt A Pet: It's better than marriage A really cute story about how having a pet is the next best thing, or sometimes even better, than being married! Homage to Garuda, the Chickadee (Metered Mirror-Rhyme) An adorable tribute to a beautiful bird and all of her endearing qualities. Guardian of the Keep This was delightful in how it portrayed a very busy little pup taking the job of protecting the master’s home very seriously. legislate Made one aware of how much power is in the hands of our legislatures, and what an impact their decisions have on the welfare of animals. "Scrubbing Bubbles" An honorable mention for the cutest write about bathing cats and their antics. The photo says it all! I really related to this. A Cat in This Town Cute and clever perspective of the lives of feral cats; their “upside down” lives. Also, very tragic - but told in a humorous way - if that is possible. Alice "Hello, my name is Alice I visit every week I let kids touch and stroke me because I cannot speak, A very moving poem about pet/dog therapy." Blood Soaked Humanity "Yes I meant to use HELL in the form I did..." Very intense poem about animals who are brutally killed all for their fur or “for the price of ivory” real texas chainsaw "the shackles release her but its not to free her" A very vivid and upsetting poem about how animals suffer when they are slaughtered because THE HUMANE SLAUGHTER ACT is not being enforced by the USDA. It does not spare the reader of the horrid reality of what these poor animals go through. We're Not Gonna Take It! These animals are tired to being tested on.So when Humans threaten their lives and their home they deside to fight back! See what happens I really enjoyed this was about a tale of how a group of animals escaped from an animal-testing laboratory. PETA Stance The cutest poem about PETA (People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals), with quite a twist of humor! A Doggie Dog Life(short Story) A cute tale about how a puppy views things. I would have given more, but I was running out of points. A few of the entries, I was going to give an honorable mention to, but I noticed they had already won an honorable mention. One that I want to give special mention to here is; Black Bear A soulful write about the plight of the Black Bear, and how their home and rights are slowly being taken away from them. I loved the imagery and how the mother bear is portrayed as facing it alone. I loved all of them, and if time allowed I would comment further. All of the entries received a personal comment from me and I appreciate all of the other judges comments as well. Blessing to all of you and PLEASE keep speaking out for those who cannot for themselves!
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Amazing!
I love the feeling and pain-I mean I loe the way you described it lol!
Niice rhyme
Goodluck in the contest
xxx
Eli
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Very scary!and i like how you said what she is on last couple lines!
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Wow I kind of didn't expect it to be so graphic, it brought an instant tear to my eye.
It's a good poem and I know that this is what these poor cows go through, but I think it would have been a whole lot better if it was told with out the graphic details.
Sorry to be so straight forward about it.
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thanks,i really appreciate your honesty.i figured it would really show people what these defenseless animals really go through just to feed selfish people because no one thinks of this so they dont feel their pain they look at them as machines and not beings that actually feel pain and fear so im glad it brought a tear to your eye that was the point.thanks for reading.
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Tragically this poem is timely. I can hardly bear to think about what goes on in a slaughterhouse. The pictures on the news recently have made this issue too true for me. I hope many will sign Karen's petition and speak out for these poor animals.
Thank you for your entry in honor of Debilynn
- joanne
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I am sorry. I couldn't finish reading this right now. It is so very upsetting. I already am painfully aware of what these poor, dear animals go through; the terror, pain and cruelty. I will come back to it another time to finish. It is just too much for me right now. Maybe it is because I am tired and it hurts me too much. I hope that others will read this and truly understand the horrors that these poor animals endure. The Humane Slaughter Act is not being enforced!
The USDA is finally doing some of their own investigations, and catching only the surface of the ugliness and brutality that is going on at Factory Farms and slaughter houses. One of my favorite organizations that has been fighting for humane farming and slaughter is the Humane Farming Assoc.
Also, I have been writing to the USDA for years, and have an ongoing petition about this. Here are some links;
http://www.hfa.org/about/index.html
http://www.thepetitionsite.com/takeaction/198323701
Your write is very effective, because it upset me that much that I couldn't finish right now. I will try another time. It is just too upsetting. I am painfully aware of this going on every second of every day!
The title is good too, because this is a Texas Chainsaw Massacre that is going on under our very noses. When will society stop turning a blind eye?
If I had my way, we would all be vegetarians!
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This is earth shattering and so sadly true...if everyone had to look through a glass wall and watch their slaughter and hear their cries...maybe, just maybe...they would think twice...very moving and chilling write...
May God have pity on our souls...
Blessings,
mystic
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Wow. Is this a commentary on carnivores? Or just humans? Intense, I'll give you that. Nicely written over all, with a strong message (if I understood it correctly) conveying your beliefs on the slaughtering of animals. One mistake I noticed. "everyone" in line three should be "every one"
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good poem.
I really enjoyed it...
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Thank you for your entry in our contest, it was an interesting read.
Please join us in our final contest. Two NEW writes may be entered, any pre-writes will be DQ'd.
All the best
Sue and Jeff
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I love the metaphor in this one. This is wonderful. Thank you so much for entering.
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it was good
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You certainly get your point across, in a chilling way. I have to say the ending wasn't what I expected at all, so kudos for that! Very well penned, best of luck with it in the contest
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Well, this definitely fits the category perfectly, meaning I'm impressed by it as it was sort of what I was looking for, though not necessarily in this sort of subject. It needs a bit of spellchecking here and there, but other than that, it was a faily enjoyable read that does a good job at influencing.
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Welcome to AP!
WOW! This poem started off at one point and then went out in a totally new direction. Amazing! I like your attempt to spread awareness about being vegetarian. Excellent imagery. I would suggest you use the SPELLCHECKER so that it will help you correct the spelling mistakes present. This is good otherwise.
All the best,
Charishma
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