I’ll never forgive myself
For trusting and believing in you
And never will I forgive you either
I fell for the mask you wore
Instead of looking through it
Into your corroded black heart
You were hiding behind a bag of lies
Unwilling to reveal yourself
Afraid I’d pose useless to you afterwards
So you used me, making me believe
In all the truth you disfigured
Nothing more than simple lies
Now that you got what you wanted
You threw me away, moved on
Leaving me and my broken heart behind
Author notes
16.I guess I'm the toy that is broken
A contest entry
- Song Lyric Inspiration!! by TChaplinette.
450 points, ended December 10, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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I know this
All too well...I understand this poem in it's entirety. I was angry...and maybe should have stayed so;
"I’ll never forgive myself
For trusting and believing in you
And never will I forgive you either"
I honestly felt this way for about...two or three days...then my heart sang her name again...that's how much I love her...I wish she could love me back.
8/10! Great description and torture of one's trust!
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forgiveness...we end up kicking ourselves the most for something someone else did. "i should have known it, should have seen it" even though we couldn't.
beautiful! -
"I’ll never forgive myself
For trusting and believing in you
And never will I forgive you either"
The first stanza was simple, but it striked me as my favourite. I really loved it, describes exactly how I feel.
The poem overall was awesome, but there were a few overused phrases that you didn't make it your own.
EG. the mask &
hiding behind a bag of lies
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great but sad poem. you find a better person then that. thnx for the comment on my poem.
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I really liked it.
I fell for the mask you wore
Instead of looking through it
Into your corroded black heart
= my fave line.
great job!
Thank you for entering.=D
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