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Dire Splendor In Anguish

Creeping shallowly out of reach
To a man I will always seek
A figurine that dances in my mind
Silently making my instincts blind
Seeping through weeping slideshows
Monitoring the blood dropping from crows
Hinting a sign, maybe a dose
Fascination to edge my way a bit too close
Smelling the sweet nectar that resides
The honey flavor too far inside
Never to see the engaging side I long for
Shall I whisper my way in once more
Test the creature that lies beneath
Feel the pride swallow it in our lovable sleep
Beaming gentle remembrance of sorrow
Funeral hymns hallucinating of better tomorrows
Cuddle me close with sensational embrace
Pleasure me with unreliable grace
Handsome lad I long to hold
Eradicating your heart of all the cold

Author notes

I was with some one for three years. Now I am with some one else but this past man hunts me.
I still love him and he enters my life a lot wishing for me back.....

it hurts at times


OPTIONS ARE 2 3 AND 4 I BELIEVE IT FALLS UNDER ALL OF THOSE IN SOME WAY

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  • XxOverTheRainbowXx silver member
    May 8
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    Love the rhyming here.
    its stunning.

  • DeGraw
    July 4, 2008

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    Hunts or Haunts?

    In your notes? I know the feeling of being haunted by a past relationship. I was married before and sometimes a song will make me ache for what I thought or wished I had?
    Regards,
    Jennifer


  • GiveMeTheGun
    April 21, 2008

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    "To a man I will always seek
    A figurine that dances in my mind
    Silently making my instincts blind"

    i know how this goes. it's painful, and sometimes confusing. it really sucks. your write shows strong emotion, and your plight to find him and make everything happy and the way it was again is beautiful, though sad. an incredible write, i loved it.
    --kaT

    • NickelleteXninja
      April 21, 2008
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      Awww thank you doll.
      It was a hard thing for me to write about.. I needed help with it.. lol
      It is definitely hard to go through

  • creationsfromheart silver member
    March 6, 2008

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    a beautiful poem however much to long for this book it is 54 words or less you are more then welcome to enter another if you wish.


    • NickelleteXninja
      March 6, 2008
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      sorry I did read what you said about ow many words I just completely forgot to check after I added It... I apologize very much

      thanks for the applause and comment though

  • aligurl
    January 27, 2008

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    Oh I absolutely loved this piece. It flows perfectly. I'm sorry about your haunts. I can feel them with the way you wrote this poem. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest. May your haunts be laid to rest.

  • Jai Guru Deva
    December 12, 2007

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    Dollface, this is amazing. I love the imagery and some of the lines are so humorously true. lol.

    Good job and good luck.

  • LunaAmara gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    love it!
    i know exactly how you feel--but we're strong
    the wording is just so great
    good luck

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