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Got Ink?

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you will find them hunched over
ancient Remingtons
tap, tap, taping out tunes

or squinting in low light
at cocktail napkins and matchbooks
between shots and cigarettes

on buses and trains
missing their stops
scribbling on the palms of their hands

and the cool cats that congregate
in cafes and coffee houses
lapping up language,
and crying over spilled ink

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

image created by Deb STarr aka, Luna Tique Fringe

A poet is a sponge, soaking up life
and wringing it out on the page.

The image is mine, also.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • ScarletO gold member
    January 10, 2008
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    excellent imagery and I do like cat imagery.


  • A-Cinnamon-Spider
    December 20, 2007
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    I really like the beat of this poem, its one I'd want to snap my fingers to.
    Very well done

  • Just4u
    December 19, 2007
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    ::snapping my fingers in perfect beatnik applause::


    Hugs and Happy Holidays

    Eddy


  • branislawa
    December 19, 2007
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    Very cool!


  • frownsnfreckles
    December 19, 2007

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    creates a perfect image, can almost smell the coffee and the stale smell of nicotine. a cool poem. 'Lapping up language' what a great line


  • Balldinger silver member
    December 19, 2007

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    gradient mix...

    massive quantities of black paint and the words those puddles can spill. all toppers fall when the wind chimes begin to play...

  • Still Gonna Shine
    December 19, 2007
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    very very good. i know exactly what you have typed about.


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 18, 2007
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    cool...

    lane


  • dave xavier
    December 18, 2007
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    sorry...

    so much for submitting a comment and not even bothering to re-read it for spelling typos (lol.) please pardon my 10 thumbs on the keyboard 8-)


  • dave xavier
    December 18, 2007

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    fun and airy... we need that! :-)

    I thoroughly enjoyed it b/c I'm fairly new to writing poetry, myself, and this once again looks at a process, the mindset of a poetic ideologue rather than the ideas themselves, a bit of caricature, eh? -A fun caricature at that!

    Okay, on to any observations...hmmm...
    maybe the only thing is that last stanza doesn;t complete the thought (it's a fragment no matter if the stanza id by itself, or if it's a carry-over from any of the other stanzas.... get rid of the "and" at the beginning of the last stanza and it works as far as grammatically logical... (I know, not much of a critique, but it's pleasantly complete for the most part...

    Good job. :-)


  • StarrieNacht
    December 18, 2007
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    Truly enjoyed this read! Amazing observations about some people and how they are day in and day out. A very thought provoking piece! Thank you for sharing this and congratz on the trophy!
    Keep on writing for you have lots to say, share, teach, and learn from yourself as well as others!
    Take care
    ~night


  • sheltered
    December 16, 2007
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    Congrats m'dear. You rock.


  • tara wilson gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    excellent! I love the mood you create in this, all the word play - puuuuuurfect...lol


  • sheltered
    December 6, 2007

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    Love the image and the way it fits the poem and quote so well. Triple play. Here's to hoping you score a home run.


  • zochit2me gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    Well damn...

    That's why no matter where I go, I get wet pages

    Wonderful quote Luna and spectacular poem.

    You are so multi-talented...

    Becky


  • Bedroom Eyes
    December 3, 2007

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    This is quite simply a stroke of pure poetic brilliance.

    The quote is simply outstanding, and VERY true to anyone who takes their poetry seriously

    This piece is going to be a contender I think

    NICELY DONE!!!!!!

    Best of luck to you in the contest!!




  • PerVirtuous
    December 3, 2007
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    What a wicked and quadrangle mind you have. Looks good on you!


  • Tangled Angle
    December 3, 2007
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    This is original and just pure genius.

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