Rolling swiftly along soft white puffs of sweet
Soothing moisture swirling strands of pearly
Cotton candy consume my form gracefully
Moving me along the everlasting majestice
Blue heavens quenching the thirst from
My parched dry soul filling my mind with
Dreamlike images as little nude archers and
Flying dragons slowly pass me by
I exhale on a sigh the wind flows through me
As I wonder aimlessly along the picturesque scenery
Through pure white cotton that lovingly comforts me.
Author notes
http://gilad.deviantart.com/art/Walking-on-Clouds-42921568
Here is the picture that was assigned to me.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest by Denierim.
1000 points, ended January 5, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow! this is lovely. two thumbs up!
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gorgeous
This was gorgeous!!!!! absolutely stunning, your words, the pictures you painted in my mind, the whole concept!!!! I read it again just to admire its emanate beauty!
The thing I was wondering was...how would you feel if you put punctuation in it? I mean it is lovely the way it is, but putting punctuation would tell the reader (well you probably know this) where you want them to pause and rest and things like that...just a suggestion...I think it would be a nice addition...but anyway, your poem is just divine! inspirational! I adore it! thanks for sharing!!!
x from the ashes x
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this is a beautiful and soothing poem that captures beautiful imagery within it. well done and best of luck
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soothing
a very beautiful soothing poem...very relaxing...sweet poem -
Beautiful imagery in this poem. Very lovely, thanks so much for continueing to share your talent here.
ephiphany♥
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This is a beautiful poem! The imagery bursts out at the reader wonderfully, and you did a great job with the picture prompt. The most luck in the contest,
Vivien
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A dream... That's the first thing that came in to my mind after reading this. A beautiful dream of hopping there, up on the clouds... I've been wondering what it would be like up there and you painted such a sweet image of that.
I like this poem a lot. It reads so differently depending what you're thinking while reading it. I could see the dream in this one, and the picture too where the perosn is walking against the horizon, the water reflecting the clouds... In all the ways I read this, it read beautifully, and your wording surely is wonderful. It brought out this soothing feeling that made me smile towards the end. I like that.
Wonderful work with this one!
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