Tattered mind,
a twisted heart.
Pinned to a tree,
a secret note set into bark.
This tortured love found a branch to cling onto.
A fragile mind can only take so much,
with one strong wind you took all its trust.
Against the cold the stars look so fake,
yellow paper machee.
No warmth, no angst to feel anything real.
When will this fiend set you free...
Stronger winds make torturous storms,
a calloused layer has finally formed.
To feel nothing real,
to see nothing beautiful.
Love was right in front of you…
The tree that caught you by a thread
has finally come to its end.
One cold winter is all it took,
a few battered minds are all you shook.
Now watch your leafs crumble to dust,
the love you once had is no more.
You tore its trust…
Look at all that you've become,
a monstrosity..
You have turned this love away to run.
No more will it be,
you have worn it down.
And now the deed is done...
Author notes
not every family is perfect.
A contest entry
- Divorce by Moon Raven.
475 points, ended March 7, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pain In Poetry by Jadis Blade.
450 points, ended April 11, 2008, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Clean your Closet. by surface--tension.
500 points, ended June 10, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love the tree imagery in this. I don't think any family is perfect. Very nice job.
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Excellent!!
Well written & versed--Very heartfelt!
Congratulations on the HM!
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Wow, I love the usage of metaphors. They are very well done and really help add to the emotion of this piece. The words form a sad little movie in my mind of a very mixed up home through the eyes of its inhabitants. I can feel the pain through your words. I'm sorry for the pain you've endured and the family you watched crumble before you. Well done. You have my best wishes in the process of healing.
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I like this one. I find it amusing how we've both written something on this (A lynching) and in some ways they're so alike yet so different.
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