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Up on the Third Floor...

Up on the third floor,
room three oh nine,
A Christmas party,
doing fine,

all the co-workers,
are half crocked,
all of the doors
are safely, locked.

Uh oh, no!
Here comes Joe,
uh oh no,
Here comes Joe, oh!
weaving and slurring,
his every word...
Man! that guy is such
a nerd.

Over in the corner,
in the easy chair,
Amanda and Larry,
what a pair!

Hugging and drinking,
while they talk,
she's in management,
he's in stock.

Uh oh, no!
Here comes Joe,
uh oh, no,
Here comes Joe, oh!
weaving and slurring,
his every word...
Man! that guy is such
a nerd.

Over by the window,
dressed in plaid,
the best darn boss
I've ever had.

Bonuses for Christmas,
this party too,
a whole week off
with nothing to do.

Ho, ho, ho!
there goes Joe,
ho,ho, ho,
there goes Joe, oh!
stumbling and,
falling to the floor,
cover him up,
and let him snore!

I love this company,
and my friends,
but this is where,
my, night ends.

I'm going home now
to my family,
and help them decorate
the Christmas tree.








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Sing to the tune of "up on the housetop"

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  • Elvenfairy
    January 26, 2008

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    the company christmas party. Being in college I've never been to one, but from everything I've heard about them I al half goad of that. Thanks for entering my contest. Sorry it's taking me so long to judge, but as you may be able to imagine, it takes a while to read so many poems and pick out the very best. Merry belated christmas!


  • Rae the MoonShine
    December 21, 2007

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    Hello and welcome to my contest! I'm so glad you entered...and what an intriguing option. I find it highly amusing to say the least. It's different from some of the others I've read...but probably more realistic.

    You had a few places where the rhythm was a bit off, but overall, I was very pleased with the effect. You did a lovely job, and I really had a good laugh out of this, especially the chorus. Wonderful job, and good luck in my contest!

    -Rae


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    December 18, 2007
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    I have to apologize to all of you who did not win a trophy. I didn't realize my printer had a jam and it had not printed out all entries, so your entry may not have been judged.

    I have set up a new contest so you can all enter your entries into the new contest and I will judge all entries that did not win a trophy in the new contest.

    Here it is! http://allpoetry.com/contest/2382462

    Hope to "see" you there!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 17, 2007

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    This is great! Thanks a lot for sharing
    this funny little Christmas tune that
    you wrote here. Keep it up and good
    luck to you with it in the contest!




    Jeremy0826


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    Haha! This is so fun! Wish we had videos for all of these fun songs. Thanks so much for entering.


  • daviscth
    December 11, 2007

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    This is wonderfully thought out. I loved the imagery. It was awesome. Thanks for posting in my contest and all the best at judging. Merry Christmas, Cathy


    • islekine gold member
      December 11, 2007
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      Thank you for reading and commenting.

      And thanks for a chance to enter pre writes!
      Mele Kalikimaka!
      *PEACE*


  • Melodies
    December 11, 2007

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    Fine fun!

    Very funny and such fun! I love rewrites of songs to make them more sparky and you really did this one up fine.

    • islekine gold member
      December 11, 2007
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      Thanks!

      I'm glad you enjoyed it!
      Mele Kalikimaka!
      *PEACE*

  • Judith Chandler
    December 8, 2007

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    Some quite funny and realistic comments on Christmas parties. It's quite seasonal.

    Thanks for entering my contest.

    • islekine gold member
      December 11, 2007
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      Thanks for the contest!

      I enjoy re writting songs...
      Mele Kalikimaka!
      *PEACE*


  • NeanderthalMan
    December 7, 2007

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    Uh Oh this is a Good one!

    Very funny! That's sounds like a lot at work parties with all the inter-office nuances and affable drunks. This is definitely very imaginative and humorous...well done!


    • islekine gold member
      December 8, 2007
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      Mahalo!

      I'm glad you enjoyed it....I love re writing songs...
      See you around!
      Write on!
      *PEACE*


  • Florida Sunshine
    December 6, 2007
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    The funny thing is I could hear the tune as I read the piece ~ GREAT job~ VERY funny ~ VERY entertaining... I even work with a joe... who can be just like that! LOL

    Terrific job ~ for being the 1st one in... Thanks for entering Good luck to you!

    • islekine gold member
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanks...I love writing new words

      for songs and poems....
      Write on! Thanks for a great contest!
      *PEACE ON EARTH*

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