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- Little Reminders -

 

 

 

 

 

 

He bent edges with ego folded
under respected little reminders
written purposely from prior convictions
tucked inside convenient vacancies.

Voice of reason avoided ridicule
yet alter persona pressed issues;

pushed sanity over serrated edge
and watched wings swallow air
just to test flight [this time]

if attitude slightly adjusted
or punctured rice paper holes.












 

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  • leander Moderators member
    December 29, 2007

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    I'm not going to blab the crap out of myself about this poem because... well... I don't know what to say anyway

    Take out your most beautiful dress already, I'm moving you to the preliminary list


  • Tam
    December 6, 2007
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    uhhh....I think I went out with this guy Saturday night...

    and I'm NOT joking...

    wow...there is nothing here to pimp beautiful...I fear the poor judge may burst into tears upon reading this poem...
    perhaps you should post a disclaimer in the title...give the poor guy a fair chance? LOL
    you go, girl...
    nobody does it like you pretty lady!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Swan song gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    This was really something You always have a refreshing perspective and as always you are a joy to read. Well done master poet well done!


  • Amera gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    What a beautiful way to speak of "Post it Notes" Yhis is so very cool! I love it!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    Leander can't pimp this poem, he can pimp your ride, your cellphone (he works with those), but this poem is just perfect the way it is!

    A little reminder to you....


  • penman gold member
    December 3, 2007
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    Excellent

    What great creation you have penned. Best of luck in the contest precious.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    Nicely done, Des
    I, too, felt a bit of anger in this piece but that's a sign of excellent poetry; when it makes you feel
    All the best to you,hon!
    Many hugs,
    Sandy


  • HaleyMary
    December 2, 2007

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    Powerful write, Desire. Seemed metaphorical, too. The sanity and serrated edge lines made me think of anger for some reason and of how some people lose their tempers sometimes. Good luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    December 2, 2007

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    What a read this one is!! You know I am trying to figure out what part I like of this one best, and really can't! It is great!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nettie

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