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This is the end of my sorrow

This is the end of my sorrow
No more you no more world
Forget  it all their is no point in living tomorrow
The only way to live is it bleed

Escape this dream
Forget about the world and the pain
If everything I do I regret
Is there A point to continue

You caused me pain
I can take it from everyone but you
You were supposed to care save me form them
Then that cold day you changed

I was betrayed You become the tragic hero
The one to say I hate you to
Join their side
Leave me to die

So I'll end my sorrow the only way
I know how I knife in hand
And a poetry book in the other
Bleed the pain then write the scars away

This will be my escape
I feel forget our love I will most past their hate
This is the last day their won't be a tomorrow
This is the end of my sorrow

Author notes

I hate it The one girl I loved the one who promised she would never stop loving me simply because no one else cared about me. Should have figured it was a lie but me being dumb couldn't see that.

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  • Anna Emkah
    December 4, 2007

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    Love can be so cruel sometimes. You trust a person and then she betrays you. We have all had these experiences in our lifes. At the moment when it happens, you get a feeling that you will never be happy again, but I am sure after a while you forget it and find new love. Everybody grows in life by those experiences.
    A few remarks: In your poem are quite a few typo's. *---* and a comma here and there would be great too.

    This is the end of my sorrow
    No more you, no more world
    Forget it all, *their* is no point in living tomorrow
    The only way to live *is it* bleed

    Escape this dream
    Forget about the world and the pain
    If everything I do I regret
    Is there *A* point to continue

    You caused me pain
    I can take it from everyone but you
    You were supposed to care, save me *form* them
    Then that cold day you changed

    I was betrayed, You become the tragic hero
    The one to say I hate you *to*
    Join their side
    Leave me to die

    So, I'll end my sorrow the only way
    I know how I *--*, knife in hand
    And a poetry book in the other
    Bleed the pain then write the scars away

    This will be my escape
    I feel, forget our love, I will *most past?* their hate
    This is the last day, *their* won't be a tomorrow
    This is the end of my sorrow

    Anna.