I was wrong again...
but I swear... this won't ever happen again...
I will not fall at no one elses feet, begging them to love me.
I refuse to let you know how much I really care,
because after all, you never really cared at all...
you never took a second look at me and said;
[let's give her a chance, maybe she really loves me]
but that's right, that time has come...
{the time to let go}
[That time when all the dreams go down the drain,
where all the sweet whispers disperse in thin air,
when your name, your smell, your smile and your vivid image is [gone]
When the only thing left in me is jsut the pure essence of a ripped-out
[B R O K E N
♥ ]
I never understood you,you were supposed to be perfect,
[ it was Valentine's... You should've been... but you weren't]
Midnight and still in thought....
Why do you lie to me, if I never lied to you?
you don't deserve me..... you don't deserve noone...
It's time....
Don't cry to me,
if you felt for me,
you would've been here with me, loving me, holding me....
pack up your thoughts, your image, your self,
because it's time to let go of you....
[Goodnight && Goodbye]
Author notes
"All I wanted was to be your heroe, your superstar.
But now I know, I'm better of as a rockstar..."
option 1: love/ heartbreak
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me emotions by BonaFidePoet.
600 points, ended December 3, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Give Me Something To Read by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended January 18, 2008, 88 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Catagories!!!!! by Maybe.I.Am.Broken..
315 points, ended December 10, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suicide, Kill me....
Comments
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A-W-S-O-M-E!!!!!
Good Luck in the contest!
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fabulous!
great job! very gripping -
well said
very good thnx for tha comment btw
this was well written expressing lots of emotion
very gripping!!!! u r a true artist;] -
wowzer!
Fabtastic poem, very well penned, best of luck to you
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Very VERY well done!!! Its such a powerfull write!!! keep writing
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woah.....
I like this poem of yours, it really shows your feeling and emotiong here, that's what I really look for in my contests, to see if the person uses emotion and feeling. I wish you best of luck in my contest and will either add or not add. -
"Parting...
is such sweet sorrow" written very well, the turmoil going through the mind comes from your words with intenseness, and real feeling...ian.
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I really like this. So much thought and feeling really come though. I love the setup and the picture, and it's a good way to express the overall concept. Great job.
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this is really good!!!
Midnight and still in thought....
Why do you lie to me, if I never lied to you?
you don't deserve me..... you don't deserve noone...
It's time....
Don't cry to me,
if you felt for me,
you would've been here with me, loving me, holding me....
pack up your thoughts, your image, your self,
because it's time to let go of you....
[Goodnight && Goodbye]
that first one, just stood out in a very good way. the last two stanzas there, they reminded me of "Call Me When You're Sobor"... haha. great work! keep it up!
Crimson -
nice excellent applause no wait.... snaps
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