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A broken heart

I no longer love you
He looked in her eyes
The incredible pain felt
She tried to disguise
She clenched her teeth strongly
To hold back the tears
Hed broken her heart
Shed feared it for years
She hardened her heart
Became angry and cold
And the saddened young girl
Grew bitter and old
and only because
of a boy years ago
would she ever be happy?
We will never know.

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  • Ulimate
    August 4, 2008

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    Very nice cadence.. and this is a great part:

    She clenched her teeth strongly
    To hold back the tears
    Hed broken her heart
    Shed feared it for years

    I normally don;t like this structure of a poem, but it really works in this write, well done.


  • Rj
    December 5, 2007
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    I've got to say this has a pretty strong cadence. Which tells me that you either have a good ear or are counting stressed sylables, which is good, actually very good... All poems need to have some structure and understanding basic structure is helpful in developing your skills.