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fire

i run from the flames
from the deathly embrace
i look back fearfully
into its amber face

i can feel the flames
leaping at my heels
the burn causes a pain
i can just barely feel

i cant escape
the thought runs through my mind
i think of my family
and what they will find

and then i see it
so perfectly clear
i cannot leave them
they need me here

i know i will live
will not die in the flames
but after this day
Ill never be the same

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  • amanda vampiress
    September 8, 2008

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    Interesting!

    I like this poem. The rhyme gave it a nice touch, and the imagery was lovely. It felt as if I was there with you, trying to escape the fir. Keep up the good work.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 28, 2008

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    Nice write. Love the background which added to the feel. Liked the rhyme as well, and the last stanza really tied the whole poem together really nicely. Nice job on this one!!

  • Ulimate
    August 4, 2008

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    As i read this, i kept thinking to myself, what is she really writing about.. nice flow, decent cadence, enjoyable read.. i like ending, it beings the whole poem home:

    i know i will live
    will not die in the flames
    but after this day
    Ill never be the same