converging aspects of you
enticing my heart...
nuances of you sparking
this sense of love adorning
Senses enlivened,
converging aspects of you
enticing my heart...
nuances of you sparking
this sense of love adorning
converging aspects of you
enticing my heart...
nuances of you sparking
this sense of love adorning
Author notes
My first Tanka and added an Acrostic element into it also (Scent)(another first)
Options, Options, && Ooh - OPTIONS!: Option # 3 -- Love
In a list
A contest entry
- Options, Options, && Ooh - OPTIONS! by Shadow Darkstar.
600 points, ended December 10, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TANKA scent of love in the air. by Swan song.
450 points, ended December 15, 2007, 1 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites only!!!! by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended December 30, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ SET the BAR ~ Anything Goes~ Possible of 5750 points handed out! by Florida Sunshine.
950 points, ended February 24, 2008, 182 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 2007 - everything under 25 lines by leander.
1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 167 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Mania by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Creative
Very original with the aspects of love, romanticism, and light sensuality combined together. But aside from all of that, the combination of two different forms really played each other off well. -
wow this was very beautiful! so simple but full of emotion! i love it!!! i wish you the best of luck in the set the bar contest!
your fangirl
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Ooh, a tanka
quite a nice one you have written here. A very romantic and maybe even sensual little poem this is
thanks for this entry as well!
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Thanks again for the nice comment left with this work,
Evan
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I'm sorry to say I'm not familiar with the format ~ I luv the part that you added "Scent" going down ~ it gives the umpff to the read. ~ The words carry beautiful ~ you did a terrific job ~
Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ Good luck to you
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Thanks for the nice comment. Here's what a Tanka is..sorta on teh same line as as haiku:
Another Japanese poem is the tanka. This has thirty-one syllables arranged in five lines (five, seven, five, seven, seven).
Easy as that...lol,
Evan
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Oh I see your a handsome fellow too~ Thanks for the format ~ really is beautifully ~ Makes a big difference on that info too~ thanks so VERY much ~ it is appreciated ~ Good luck hun~
P.S. Your lady friend must feel incrediably special
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This is quite beautiful and full of expressive wording... Thanks for this entry... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Thanks so much for the wonderful comment you have graced this work and page with,
Evan
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This is really good if this is your first tanka I can't wait to see the next one
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Thanks so much for the lovely comment on this work and for teh silver award in your contest. Both truly appreciated,
Evan
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This is a wonderful verse for your first try at this form. Weaving in the senses as the prompt calls for.
Love is evident in each line. Best to you with this.
Blue
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Thanks for the visit and for the lovely comments and wishes left here,
Evan
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Wow, your first, I have so much confidence in you, hahaha this shows off more of your brilliance
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Thanks for taking the time to visit this wok anf=d for the wonderful comment left here for it,,oh yes, and me..lol,
Thanks again,
Evan
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this is a powerful piece underscored by the brevity of the form. The graphic is great as well...very soft and sensual. Nice job and thank you for sharing with the group
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Thanks again for the visit and for the wonderful comment you have left gracing this page. Both are truly appreciated,
Evan
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Your first two lines were really strong and your vocabulary usage was spot on. Very unique and original touch, that you would weave in an acrostic(Scent) I find that clever, and it adds to your piece, while blending and challenging the reader to see it, just the same. The flow was perfect, and it didn't lose rhythm. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for visiting this page of mine nd the wonderful comments you ,eft here for this work. About the Acrostic, do people usually capitalize the letters involved ? I dont know, first time, but curious I guess. One of my pet peeves is people who capitalize the first letter in a line whether it should be or not...Arghhhhh!!! Lol... just seems to throw off rhythm. Anywya, thanks again,
Evan
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I like the part where you said "Senses enlivened". That immediately kind of gives your mind a signal to take in the words a little more clearly. Great write. I couldn't tell that that was your first time.
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Thanks so much for stoppinn in here and visiting my pages and, too, for the nice comments. I guess I startd it out that a bit because of the prompt and to signify that all senses were involved, sight, smell, touch, hearing, everything, all coming together at once, assaulting my heart and then all the little nuances of her, those things that made her different than other women in my eyes, that made her special, which brought about "love's adorning".
thanks again for the nice comments,
Evan
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this was so very well written
i i liked the part where you said senses enlivened
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Thanks again for this visit to my humble pages and for the wonderful comment you have graced this page and this work with,
Evan
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Brilliant
short but sweet, and great take o nthe acrostic cuz theres a scent within the poem
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Thank you for stopping Katy..this is a Tanka which is generally 5 lines and the Acrostic variation worked out nicely. Thanks again for stopping and for the kind comments you have left here,
eb
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Wonderfully expressed. Skillfully composed!
Love~
Az
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Thank you Az for stopping in here and for the wonderful comments you have left once again..always appreciated,
eb
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Excellent great work with this all the syllables are right and it is neat that you used acrostic techniques too. Great Take of the prompt too.
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Thanks so much again for visiting another of my works nd for the wonderful comments you left with it,
eb
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