Trevor was a dragon who’s wings have never grown
all the others learned to fly, poor Trevor was not shown,
living beneath a mountain top in a cave hid out of sight
the cries of Trevor’s lonely roar were always heard at night.
One day his cries were heard so loud a man had came to see
where the noise was coming from, just what this sound could be,
venturing in the cold dark cave so brave with not a fear
he found young Trevor there alone within his eyes a tear.
The man was gentle wise and old, a wizard some would say
with potions there he went to work, for Trevor to display,
such mighty wings allowing him to lift up to the sky
this magic of the passing man enabled him to fly.
Trevor could not stay within the cave so small
now with wings that were so large he had no room at all,
so to the mountain tops he soar majestically he flew
a dragon who once had no wings began his life anew.
Children sometimes see him, still out there in the sky
swooping over mountain tops he quickly passes by,
night time now is quiet from Trevor not a peep
the only sound sometimes heard, him snoring in his sleep.
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A contest entry
- TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 12,000) - Part 2 Children's by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended December 12, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Very Precious -- Excellent Writing
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Jeff and I (Sue) would like to congratulate you on winning our Childrens contest, it was, without doubt a unanimous decision.
Your poem was an excellent rhyming poem with a
great story that any child would enjoy reading.
Again congratulations, and please do enter the other contests in our rhyming challenge.
All the best, Sue and Jeff
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This is a neat little poem I really enjoyed reading it. The name that you gave him is cute Good luck in this contest
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Oh what a creation...
love the imagination
in this one... this should be a childrens book... Love it.
Love,
Delila
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This is a delightful children's tale. A dragon without wings to fly is a dragon without much purpose but thank goodness there was a wizard at hand to help sort him out. Magic is a wonderful thing! Good luck in the contest.
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I love the name!! The rhythm is suberb-a true poem with flow and an enchanting story to boot! Loved it lotsx Hilly
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this is a beautiful poem and u have such talent..
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Wonderful job fun poet!
That was just so much fun, please send we LOVE TREVOR
t-shirts with his pic on it!!
How in the world could anyone resist this fun and
adventurous poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
good job!!
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Awesome
I really loved it, I am left speechless. Great job.
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I think this is very sweetly written, my friend!
I LOVE this! I'd read it to my grandson
Wishing you all the very best of the best!
Many hugs,
Sandy -
This rhyming poem has a smooth lyrical feel.The imagery has clarity with Trevor the dragon being an endearing character that I feel certain children would warm to within this flight of fantasy where he plays catch up and learns after all what he needs to know and is able to at last fly,grow and go.
A couple of suggestions ( not criticisms) the first line in the first stanza perhaps who's may be whose? And within the same line have maybe had? Second stanza first line perhaps come instead of came? Fourth stanza line three perhaps soared instead of soar?
A lovely,enchanting tale which is sure to captivate children and invite their own imagination to fly.
Good luck to you in the contest.
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