Oh my love
I am at bewilderment that where from I should start
as you are universally a divining piece
while my one hand espousing to a picnic at your thighs
at the same time, my second-hand moves for a feel of
the magic of your magnetizing breasts
my lips are also roaring to eat your lips synchronously
and the core filament of my body is
not at the temperament to take a risk of the jam
it inaugurates the rain
Oh my love...
A contest entry
- Weave Me Some Sensual Magic by StormGoddess.
390 points, ended December 6, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
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hey there
a really passionate poem, my favourite line is
"as you are universally a divining piece"
thank you for entering
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A very unique piece of love penned. Sensual and intriguing. A lovely write! Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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such a delightful caring write of feelings. thank you for sharing. success in the contest.
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Shivers
So sensually expressed within a natural nature that left shivers extending across my heart...
very nice write.
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For a shorter piece, this packs a punch in the sensual department. Wow! Very nicely done.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Storm -
Sweet.
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You certainly have written a sensual piece here. Sensuous images and colorful language made my heart beat a bit faster, the 'hunger' for the lover is almost palpable. Still, I feel a depth to this, more than the love of man and woman, rain upon the earth from the sky, lips roaring to eat lips...very strong metaphors for life and connectedness of being. Love this one. Best of luck in the contest. Peace always, Rhonda
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:)
Very sensual and lots of passion within this piece. I like the mood in it too. Wonderful write.
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