With waves of breath
and plots of fingers
we move and dance with
eyes shut tight and limbs wide open.
Hold and sustain your dominion
within my female cares and flesh,
knowing I have no worry.
Take me to the place that's fit.
I am needy of an inn for the night
and tomorrow.
I will leave easy
because it is you that will cause my innocence further.
Your love has proven cause that
I may never need to lie down again.
Author notes
The kind of lovin' we all desire for.
A contest entry
- lay me down on sheets of linen... by Quixotically Yours.
400 points, ended December 10, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Breathe Me In. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended August 18, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It's easy to see why you already have a silver cup for this piece of work. I loved the imagery in this. Thanks for posting.
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Sensual and strong, the first stanza is simply amazing. My favorite at any rate. Your descriptive words take me back to those newlywed nights of divine exploration.
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This is definately someting different, isn't theat truly the kind of loving we all desire, perfectly written, well done and best to you
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This poem has already won silver in another contest, but I won't bother dqing it because my contest has already ended. I got a bit confused when I first read it; it didn't fit the specifications of my contest. Well done for the silver trophy though, I'm pleased that it did well. Once I knew what it was about and reread it I enjoyed it!
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Thank you for your beautifully spoken and sensual entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This is really great I like it
Cara
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Thank you!
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This is well done and its full of desires. Your wanton need to give yourself to this person...
"Hug and hold me through this place
of inexperience, securely,"
The first time is special....wonderful write..thanks for entering our contest.....novy
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"Your love has proven cause that
I may never need to lie down again."
Very nicely written. Love is love, you think?
Thank you for entering our contest, and good luck!!
Brazos -
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Thank you! It's encouraging to hear good words about my poetry.
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