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Bending the Sky

I bend in your curves-

      and you move me

into the field of my soul

a clear destinations journey

as blue poppies linger in sleep

 

I see raindrops open-

time ticking minutes to

memories

the flow of life      smooth

comforting      warm

like coffee in early morning

reflections

 

I conform to your skin

filling the void left from

echoes of past hurt

my soul no longer starving

behind blue sorrows of sadness

 

as I lean away from everything

flickers of yesterday fall

like shooting stars across a

blue-black night sky

creating lightning storms in the distance

 

I sketch them inside my head-

painting new syllables      determined

turning the page as time propels me

forward

 

my portrait of words fill the sky

with vivid hues of bright color as you

become part of my painting

 

I live in your lines

inside my skin

once again connecting

 

            flesh to flesh 

  

re-writing who I am

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    Oh my This is stunning! I am spechless I have read about fifty poems today and yesterday i readabout fifty the day before twenty five this is the best one i've read for at least three days

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 2, 2007

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    Becky...
    this is so beautiful
    i love the falling/shooting stars
    what a gorgeous metaphor that is

    i wake up to find this day for myself
    it is what keeps me going

    no more behind blue days
    but new colours for the future

    this is really beautiful.




  • Hell In Harmony
    December 2, 2007

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    I bend in your curves-

    and you move me

    into the field of my soul

    a clear destinations journey

    as blue poppies linger in sleep




    as I lean away from everything

    flickers of yesterday fall

    like shooting stars across a

    blue-black night sky

    creating lightning storms in the distance


    Those were amazing!
    a good ending too! =] I liked it alot!
    Kat


  • Mallig gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem, wonderful picture of words drawn with words, and great metaphor. Good luck in the contest!


  • Binary Frog
    December 2, 2007

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    This is a really good poem, the imagery is really effective, and I also like the shape of the poem, the use of indents mid-sentence gives interesting pauses, and so makes the poem more interesting. It's a beautiful poem.


  • Whispers of Hope
    December 2, 2007

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    Wow this is an amazing piece. I loved it everything your imagery and discription were easy to see Wow what a beautiful poem!! ~Ocean~

  • Rowan gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    wow... big sigh...
    this is beautiful, deep, and damn moving.
    Brilliant work hon. That last line stole my breath completely.

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