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Johnny Walker

This is the story of when two souls crossed,

one soul was a good soul, but the other was lost...

They crossed on the sidewalk one September day

this is what I heard, the two souls say... 

 

 

 

Hey fool...where's the love in you
I'm dying on the floor looking up at you

 

But you're...so fake living your life in the fast lane,

But you're...so fake living your life in the fast lane...

 

 

Downtown Jimmy he was made out of glass 

two time loser, who hit the drinking tracks.

Give him a nickel he would look for a score,

give him ten dollars he would find him a whore.

 

Downtown Jimmy was hitting seventy five

been living on the streets since the age of nine.

His mother was a junkie, his father a pimp,

this is what this life had become of him...

 

He had...no shame living his life in the gutter lane,

He had...no shame living his life in the gutter lane... 

 

Smooth talking Johnny was the Devils Aid,

who walks the streets of Brooklyn taking souls away.

Criminally corrupted selling drugs on the streets

then he'd sell the hookers as a passing treat.

 

He had...no shame living his life of the gutter lane,

He had...no shame living his life of the gutter lane...

 

Then Jimmy said...

 

I can see those angels calling, I can see them come my way

I can see those angels calling, I can see them come my way

Come my way... Come my way... 

 

But Johnny's eyes turned red and the Devil said... 

 

No way Jimmy you ain't hitching a ride,

going back to heaven with the angel of light.

You're coming to hell where I'll make you cry,

you're coming to hell and you're never die...

 

He had...no shame living his life for the Devils gains 

He had...no shame living his life for the Devils gains 

 

Downtown Jimmy climb up off the floor

guarded by Angels who made the heavens roar.

And out of his jacket, an empty bottle appeared 

He stuck it in the Devil, Johnny walker disappeared.

 

He had...no shame guarded by Angels in the gutter lane

He had...no shame guarded by Angels in the gutter lane

 

No shame...guarded by Angels in the gutter lane.

 

Author notes

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I have taken this picture on to a very different picture.

http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs11/300W/i/2006/239/e/9/Walk_on_by_by_MyPrivateParty.jpg

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 4, 2008

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    This is really great, unfortunately since it has already won a green trophy I cannot consider it. Thank you.


    whisper


  • TwiztidMaggot
    December 18, 2007

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    This is a really good poem and that pic is very good. I like it. thanks for your entry! keep it up! best of luck in my contest.

    Crimson


    • Timespell
      December 18, 2007
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      Thanks Crimson...Thought I would give you something different to look at from me, instead of the dark stuff lately!

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Catressa gold member
    December 2, 2007
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    • Timespell
      December 4, 2007
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      Thanks for the clappies, I take it you like this short story.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

  • Tecohe
    December 2, 2007

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    A Reward for this write is due

    Thanks for not being predictable in this story. We will be surprised to see who the Angels champion!
    good form and it should be put to some great music!
    Tecohe

    • Timespell
      December 4, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and for your nice comment... I appreciated the fact that in your opinion you thought it should be worthy of a reward.

      Thanks again for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • LadyUnique silver member
    December 2, 2007

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    yep...i can hear this as a song the chorus is catchy
    i took a peek of the pic after i read your poem... then i read it again. perceptive take on the picture
    i'm not a fan of thyme and this poem is an exception. good job on that
    solid write that reads like a winner to me

    • Timespell
      December 4, 2007
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      Thanks for taking time to read and comment on this piece. I am glad you thought it worthy of being the winner. Also for the fact that you could hear a tune with this piece.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Eon Blue
    December 2, 2007

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    I've known up closely people like that, somehow feeling attached to that kind of lifestyle.
    You captured the essence in a very creative way. I've always enjoyed the story-telling type of poems. I also enjoy whenever guilty feelings and characters are impersonated with such a deep inner voice.

    Good luck at the contest. I believe you definitely deserve a spot at the top.

    • Timespell
      December 4, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting, I can take satisfaction from all the comments left on this piece to know it should of been in the top 3... But never mind, people have there own opinions, and view differently.

      Thanks again.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

  • Francis Vincent
    December 2, 2007

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    very good

    i actually write recovery poetry with a humourous slant
    but
    your work is so engrossing
    all the lost souls to "john barleycorn" actually
    being a "purveyor" of johnnie walker red
    brings back a lot
    very good

    • Timespell
      December 2, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting Fraankie. Glad this piece of work brought a smile to your face.

      Thanks again.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Tarja
    December 2, 2007

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    I had to look at the picture! This was just spectacular. It really took the contest to a new level I think. It's so raw, intense and full of emotion. I loved it... It really shows.. the bittersweetness of life. Not that you should need it but good luck!

    • Timespell
      December 2, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks Tarja, I must admit I did enjoy writing this piece. It was something that I could picture from the picture prompt.

      Thanks again for reading and for your nice comment.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Quill
    December 2, 2007

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    Outstanding!

    If there is any justice in the world this should win gold,if it don't take consolation in the fact you just blew this reader away!

    • Timespell
      December 2, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting. I would say I really got carried away by this piece of work. Something about that picture just struck a cord in me, and this is what I came up with! I have obviously got a little tune in my head for this one.

      Thanks again for reading.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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