As I go walking along the beach,
I look back to find my footprints,
And am reminded of a certain poem.
The one about the man and God carrying him through life.
The footprints are deep.
And soon fill with water.
You can see each toe
Before the tide washes them away.
The grainy sand is a dark tan.
But in its own way,
A very beautiful color.
I see it begin to glow with the morning sun.
The waves next to me are a deep sea green.
And I can smell the wonderful salty air.
The waves slowly roll back and forth,
Meandering, taking all the time in the world.
There is no one else around,
So I make another footprint.
The soft sand slowly covering my foot.
And soon I pull it out.
The sound of waves rolling,
The smell of salty ocean air.
The sight of such clear footprints,
It's all so wonderfully calm and peaceful.
Eventually I turn to leave,
But am stopped by one last look.
I turn back around
And look at the ambidextrous footprints in the sand.
Author notes
Option #4. This is among one of my best poems - in my opinion. but it's just me thinking that. i hope you enjoyed it! I am 14 years old.
Koko
A contest entry
- Inspire Me :- Multiple choice of pictures by Reptile Lady.
700 points, ended December 6, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Or No Prewrites, Teenagers Have Options. by broken.inside.
500 points, ended January 9, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Last Contest - Give Me Your Best by Nam.
7100 points, ended December 17, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want Gold Trophy Winners Judged by RedwingSpirit.
900 points, ended January 11, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pimp up my picture inspired poetry by leander.
400 points, ended January 31, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS Freeverse by Swan song.
1300 points, ended January 6, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did you like it? Anything to fix?
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
Very good take on the footprits poem and very creative
-
Again you have managed to display quite some visuals with your words here
thanks once again for another entry in this contest!
Leander -
kokosheartbroken259 Excellent poem it has wonderful Imagery i remembered this from My ap Mum's Contest congrats on the Gold Good luck in mine and thanks for entering
-
personally, i love the ocean and the beach. and this is a beautiful poem that brings me all the way back to the beach, it doesn't just tell it shows and that is what i think all the best poems should do.
thank you so much for enteringmy contest -
Congratulations
Congratulations to you on winning Gold in my Contest.
As the contestants names were unknown to me until now,
I am truly delighted to give you this award.
You created such emotion and feelings within this beautiful poem.
Take care and hope you continue to write some amazing poems.
Hugs Juliex
-
Beautiful memories of our protector. Good luck.
-
Amazing write
Creative, full of wonderful imagery.
I can feel, taste and smell the whole atmosphere of walking on that beach, and seeing the footprints in the sand.
Yes I love it...
Thank you for taking part in my contest
Best wishes Julie
-
Wow.... that is amazing girl!!! I love it... it's absolutely one of your best.... I hope you win or at least place in that contest!
-
This really is a fine poem...
A deeply-thought out poem that has wonderful lines of truth. 
Good work, poet... 
-
Wow... This is truly fantastic. A great write.
The sound of waves rolling,
The smell of salty ocean air.
The sight of such clear footprints,
It's all so wonderfully calm and peaceful.
Eventually I turn to leave,
But am stopped by one last look.
I turn back around
And look at then ambidextrous footprints in the sand.
That was great, even if the last sentence doesn't make too much sense. maybe you meant "the" instead of "then"
-
-
Yep that's exactly what i meant... thanks, i sorta was typing fast...
-
-
Not a worry. I'm not used to my keyboard yet so I do that a lot
-
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
