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The Urge

Woke up today found frost perched on my window sill
It hovers in a frozen sky and gobbles up my will
Cold and shiverin' trees  are standing naked in a row
I get this urge for going  but I'm told to let it go

I have an Autumn Love with a tender touching smile
Not another one I wanted  only her to stay awhile
But after leaves fell tumbling and rumblings came of snow
She got the urge for going  I unwillingly let her go

 

The weary woes of winter  gave a cold triumphant shout
All we said and did was dying  and possibilities played out
I now see geese in chevron flight  flapping 'cause they know
She has their urge for fleeing  and she has the wings to go

I have piled the fire with kindlin'  and pull blankets to my chin
I've blocked the vagrant winter out  and locked my wanderin' in
I would call back Autumn Love  tell her to stay forever more
But she feels the urge for flying  and now I freely  let her soar

 

 

 

 

 

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  • TabbyCat
    February 13, 2008

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    Wonderful job here. I felt drawn into the mood you created here. Skilled imagery and comparisons. I really got a sense of the character you were trying to create. Lovely. Thank you for entering my contest.


    • PageTurner
      February 14, 2008
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      What a nice surprise... you've honored my lil' poem with a GOLD Trophy! I thank you for your kind words and the trophy! ~ Nicky♥


  • CCSUNSHINE x
    December 16, 2007

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    Cold and shiverin' trees are standing naked in a row


    great imagery.
    I loved this poem.
    <3

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    "I now see geese in chevron flight flapping 'cause they know
    She has their urge for fleeing and she has the wings to go"

    I really like this poem, it flows really good, it reads like song lyrics..

    i feel the sense that your heart is an opened window to let your love fly away, to free her...this is a very beautiful and selfless heart..kind of a sad poem, and then not..lol...reminds me of that quote, if you love something...set it free...this is definately in the finalists, thanks so much for this entry into my contest..

    • PageTurner
      December 16, 2007
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      Hey Tara. You read me well, my Friend. Your comment is exactly what I hoped to communicate. I'm sorry I've been a stranger I must make an effort to read more of your Poetry... I always Loved it! Thanks for your kind comments, Tara. See ya Soon. ~ Nicky♥


  • poet2angels gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    Sigh~
    This is amazing!
    Such a beautiful penning with wonderful language and metaphor....
    Such a gentle loveliness about this

    Lynda


  • penman gold member
    December 2, 2007
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    Wonderful

    Very well expressed. Terrific images and emotions shared. Best of luck in the contest.

  • cirque du soleil
    December 2, 2007

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    Woke up today found frost perched on my window sill
    It hovers in a frozen sky and gobbles up my will
    Cold and shiverin' trees are standing naked in a row
    I get this urge for going but I'm told to let it go

    I have an Autumn Love with a tender touching smile
    Not another one I wanted only her to stay awhile
    But after leaves fell tumbling and rumblings came of snow
    She got the urge for going I was unwilling to let her go

    you are soo talented...i really liked this piece.. best of luck in the contest that you have entered!


  • sometimespoetic
    December 2, 2007
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    Wonderful

    You are very talented. Great structure.

  • michaeline
    December 1, 2007

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    This is a great write.I like the descriptions and detail of the emotion that you display.The words flowed freely and your form of writing is excellent.


  • ktothecarro
    December 1, 2007
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    very well structured and pleasant to read
    nice job

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