None ever doubted she was male
and he never shared her deeper concerns
that well. In time, he almost forgot
to tell herself.
Someday, she'll forgive him too.
Author notes
Word Count: 28
A contest entry
- Free Verse - 30 Words by Dalaney.
475 points, ended December 4, 2007, 13 entries
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complicated...simple...never boring
Love, Lane
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Paste Renee's comment here... lol...
except I read it seven times.
Exceptional play on words, gender, and reader's emotions.
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Very clever!
The mixed emotions and non-gender specifics here are quite cleverly written. I am sitting here thinking now which is he, I mean...she, I mean he... Then I think, what does it matter if the person is in tuned with self. Great work. Made me read this poem about six times. LOL Still came up with the same results. It matters not, if the person is happy. WE all tend to feel the mixture you've written from time to time. God! If I had a quarter for every time someone called me "mannish". LOL I wish you the best in the contest dear heart.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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