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Shape of life

Just another amateur
dementedly looking at the white paper.
Emptiness
Distance
Not a whisper nor a scream.
Only stillness.

Where did the day go?
It seems it wanted to leave faster
from this land of big expectations.
The sun hid faster.
And the darknes?
The darkness with it's hidden smile reminds us
that even life has an ending.

When the star suddenly fades away

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Decorus Somnium
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  • BloodWhiteOleander
    January 10
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    its good i like the slight mellencholie in it.


  • Erozay
    April 25, 2008
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    good

    tis good i liked it


  • Three Doves
    February 15, 2008

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    Thank you for presenting your thought provoking work. Such is the isle of life that we have chosen to walk. Truly you are a poet and I am honoured to claim you daughter. Continue sharing your blessed talent.


  • Silvos. silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    Well put, the emotion here is overwhelming. I know all about the darkness that is inevitable and seems to come faster each day. There are so many interpetations that can come about in reading this poem, and in that aspect I love it.

    Silvos.


  • maralisa silver member
    February 10, 2008

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    i like the line the darkness with its hidden smile reminds us that even live has an ending
    when a star suddenly fades away this is so true of many situations in live a great write keep your pen moving


  • xXbroken lullabyXx
    December 27, 2007
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    this is good..kinda sad. awesome write..keep it up

  • Time focus on Me
    December 10, 2007

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    Great Work

    U have done here once again sis ure poems are just beautiful and amazin. Love readin your work its great you have alsome talent I mean alsome talent. great job and well expressed poem with full of emotions and strength. Keep the ink flowin bc its gorgeous work.
    Where did the day go?
    It seems it wanted to leave faster
    from this land of big expectations.
    The sun hid faster.
    And the darknes?
    The darkness with it's hidden smile reminds us
    that even life has an ending.

    When the star suddenly fades away


  • PureRomance
    December 1, 2007

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    This was awesome. I loved it. You did a wonderful job. God bless you and keep up the excellent work.

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