Slowly waiting for the
rain to stop.
As it pours ,my
mind thinks back.
The pain I feel
is like the rain.
It never wants
to stop at all.
I thought I was
just Dreaming.
But what a nightmare
it did become.
The love I have
helps not at all.
Now my tears fall
as soft as the rain.
No more will I feel
the fear of death.
For the pain I feel
conquers all.
A contest entry
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Comments
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aaaaaaaaaaaaah, so very sad ~ The font is a little tough to read ~ but I can understand the choice ~ Poetically I think you did a terrific job ~ I don't know why I really like it ~ so much ~ but I really do ~
Thanks so much for entering the "Set the bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ best of luck to you! -
It's kinda scary how much I can relate with this poem. It almost looks like I wrote it... scary... anyways this is a really good write and I really like it. It portrays the emotion that sadly a lot of people feel. I like the metaphor you used with the rain it really goes well with this piece.
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Thanks
i accaully wrote this five years ago but just got to put it online
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In this line:
"rain too stop."
It should just be "to" instead of "too".
Other than that, I really like this piece. I especially like when you say that your pain is bigger than your fear. I do think that you could add more to this piece, but it's also really good as it is. Good job!
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