Shadows form in the air around me.
I am alone yet I'm surrounded
By the pain of those that I've destroyed.
I hear someone's screams,
Is it mine or theirs?
So many hearts broken,
and mine completely gone.
My chest empty, yet still weighed down
as it is consumed by misery.
An eclipse draws ever closer,
but I pay no heed.
Why should I be afraid of a darkness
that reflects what I've become?
Numbness slowly seeps into my mind
as I wait impatiently for it to take over once again.
Tears flow down my alabaster skin,
the last thing I will ever feel.
Maybe love could save me,
but I think I'd rather die.
No love is worth the pain
of the memories once the happiness fades.
So why not see how dark of a shadow
I can really be?
A contest entry
- A whatever emotions contest! by dreamersalwayslive.
600 points, ended January 13, 2008, 28 entries
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Been there...
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Well..
This got me to the point of breathing hard. This is for sure a great write. This sound extrmemly personal, so I want to thank you for sharing it! At the moment though, I don't think it's the best it could be! Seperate lines could be useful here! And please read the rules! -
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the paragraph thing is my normal sort of writing, but i think putting it in free-verse stanzas would work better. thanks so much for the comments and advice ! ^_^
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np!
Btw, you may want to check over the rules again...but I still like your poem!
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wow this is good!!! You have some talent here. Full of feeling and so dark I looove it! Keep writing
Your on my favorites. and if you ever want to talk to anyone you could talk to me! I know im like some complete stranger lol but I can relate to this anyways take care and once again great write!
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thank you for the comment sorry about the spelling on my poem.
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i liked how you descibed your pain and im shore your a nice person hay if you whant you can check out some of my poems well i realy liked you poem shadow bye.
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