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So Blue

Blue tears streaming down
          (As she watched the chaos)
Blue cheeks
          (Her pleas could not be heard)
From blue eyes.
          (Through the fire and the sirens)
Her blue lips frowning
          (By the time she was noticed)
Knowing that it's too late.
          (It was already too late)

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  • Endeavor gold member
    January 4

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    Very good


    Her blue lips frowning
    (By the time she was noticed)
    Knowing that it's too late.
    (It was already too late)

    A well deserved Bronz
    The words follow the picture well

    Rick


  • Pollycheck silver member
    December 1, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry into my contest and good luck. What a fantastic take on this picture. it is simple but deep at the same time. Tells a story but leaves much up to the reader. This is great.

  • beautifulbreakdown
    December 1, 2007

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    great jobb

    this is amazing and I definetly think your a good writerr keep on keeping on