....And so the rain falls down
as our lips collide
we pull away for a second
and i see the water on ur face starts to slide
though everything around us is cold
i still feel so warm
so amzaing how something so wonderful
can form within a storm
sensual kisses wet with passion and rain
u hold me close and pull me near
and though all around us is unstable
i still have nuthing to fear
so the rain keeps falling
on the mr. and mrs.
as we lock once again
sharing rain kisses
Author notes
sorry if it sucks...suffering frum MAJOR writer's block
A contest entry
- THE PERFECT KISS by Whispering Wind.
800 points, ended January 10, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me your best! by genevieve3.
600 points, ended February 17, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very nice
very nice write for the prompt . . liked "sensual kisses wet with passion and rain" and "sharing rain kisses" . . good luck in the contest
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omgoodness...oh so sweet and yet left me aching..
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thanks ..im glad u liked it
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BREATH TAKING
This is very beautiful and filled with a sweet tender emotion of love...I kiss in the pouring rain and a heart so ready for love~ Thank you so much for sharing and for entering
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shows potential
Nice image of emotional connection within the context of an external storm....keep writing, you have potential
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nicely well put
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Great imagery... writers block? I don't think so... this is really good babi... and I read Dre's comment... no comment...
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This has great imagery. You are definately growing as a poet. An yea.....glad ya'll had fun. lol! He needs to come home more often.
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Pretty!
I like the images it paints.
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I KNEW YOU AND ELTEE DID THE SHOWER THING!!!!! Lol, but it don't suck, what's the key word in allpoetry? ALL poetry. ALL- poetry, that means every little peice of writing considered to be POETRY! Again what's the keyword in allpoetry??? But I like it.
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thanks...and NO WE DID NOT! LOL
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Wow. This is so sweet and so beautiful
I loved it!! As always!! You write so amazing and so beautiful I always love it when you share them with me I can say that you are now out of your writers block 
Bravo!! Keep writing now from here on out
God Bless You!!
Charles
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thankies...i HOPE im out the writer's block
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awww aint dat sweet??/
it don suck i like it. lol dats wussup go head and get it shawty!!!
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