I walk up to you
I try to speak
But cant
I turn in embarrassment
To walk away
But you stop me
To say hello
I turn with
A smile
To see
You
The only person
Who talks to me
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Song Lyric Inspiration!! by TChaplinette.
450 points, ended December 10, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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sad
There was so much intensity in this awesome piece! this is definitely a very well written poem! it has raw emotions! beautiful write! loved reading each line though it was short and it made me wanting o read more tho...
best of luck in the contest!
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i feel you probably could have gone deeper with that a lot deeper but that's just me. it is a good write thought
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it was really good.
I like how it really pertained to that lyric, which was great.
I would have liked a little more imagery, but I do really like it.
Thanx for entering. =D -
This is really good babe. you really capture the moment. good write!
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