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Shattered Glass

A pretty mirror the wall
Sitting there happily
Watching the days go by
One day I’m knocked
To the ground
There I lay
Who did this to me
I won’t say their name
But look what you’ve made
You’ve made me
Nothing but shattered glass

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  • longlife
    January 7, 2008
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    Good news Bad news other way around.anyway..your poem was pretty good.I enjoy reading your poetry.I like the title to.CREATIVE

    I don't know about this poem...it showed a LOT of imigery.You painted an ok picture in my head.Revealing about the shattered glass at the end made it ok.

    Your title was pretty.You had a lovley disscription of the poem as well.Great job.

    P.S. -
    Sorry,if i was TO negetaive.



  • StarIlluminated
    December 1, 2007

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    It's another simile poem! I like it..a lot! But it's kind of just like the flower one, although I don't know which one came first lol But this is awesome keep it up!


  • riasme
    December 1, 2007
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    AWESOME is this just freeverse or is there a form? There is a sort of rhyme in lines 6, 7, & 8 and it sounds really good when you say it out loud...really really awesomely awesome!!! I like the "I won't say their name" part, it's really good YAAAY

    ~ lisizzles