Column 1 Column 2
What is pain but familiar friends? I guess the answer all depends
What is hate but friends again? What will you have when this all ends
What is love I do not know Would love be a summer snow
For it never met my soul Beneath this sun I'll never know
What is rage but screams set forth? A first, a second, third, and fourth
What is death but rage ignored? Will I die the screams implored
What is life I cannot say I'll never live after today
For it's price I cannot pay I'll never live. All I could say
What is dark but heaven's shadow All the light here still seems hollow
What is sin but dark we follow Dark we drink and dark we swallow
What is right I've no perception I was not there at lights inception
For it's fruit lacks my conception I'll never hold it's bright connection
And this is And this is
The soul that I claim to bear The soul I left to your care
And this is And this is
The hole that I dug somewhere A hole with depth of no compare
In the midst In the midst
Of a Hell I found on earth Of a Hell for now inert
In the midst In the midst
Of a well of no wish's worth Of a well nightmares assert
A contest entry
- what exactly have you won? by black lagoon x.
420 points, ended December 22, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Read across each line or down each column
Comments
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Impressive! I can't say I've ever seen one like this until now. It's a great idea and you put it together nicely here. The last lines (if read as the third poem)
seem awkward to read as they repeat "and this is, and this is" but then again, it also gives it a lyrical type of feel. I may take a shot at your contest if I feel up to the challenging task of creating one of these.
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This is really quite amazing.. i find myself taken aback at how well it works.. both columns as seperate entities, and as a whole... what i think i love most, and this may not be what you intended, but nevertheless is how it is in my head, when i read them as one poem, i can almost see two people... one for each column... like a song or a play, where neither of them knows the other is there, and yet they are speaking to one another... again, i guess that's just what i get from it. The moral of the story being, it is very Very good. Bravo. I'm Thoroughly impressed.
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I want to take all your poetry and devour it so your creativity becomes a part of me and I then can write better poems.
The layout of this is surprising, inventive, amazing. It fits together anyway I read it (upside down, right to left). Good job. -
On behalf of all the judges,We would like to congratulate you on the gold.
Great job!
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aiy yi yi.i still love this after all these weeks.
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OMG! this was so BEAUTIFUL!!!! thank you for entering!!!! this is definitly the best poem i've ever seen on AP.I really love this.Double poems? that should give twice as much points because it's like you wrote us two poems,complete in-sync with one another in a perfect harmony.I cannot wait until the contest is over so i can bookmark this.
-Athena
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Thankyou for providing the contest that brought about its creation.
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i can't take my eyes of your poem.it's just too good.
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WOW
WOW! Thank you for entering our contest! Inside and out,i truely LOVED THIS!I WANTED TO CRY!you're AMAZING!THANK YOU SO MUCH!
-Pixie
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Thankyou for your kind words.
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Woah.
Congratulations.I'm phoenix.i'm judging part of the contest.You are truly magnificent.I never never seen such a magnificent intensity,especially with such creativity.I think i've never seen something so beautiful.I would close this contest right now and give you the gold,but that wouldn't be fair to anyone.Welcome to the finalists!
(btw,i'm so bookmarking this)
=]
-Phoenixed.
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