Poor Sniffy the Dragon, he wasn't so well
His fire was out and he just couldn't smell
Whilst Mummy was cooking his favourite food
He sulked by the fireside, in a bad mood.
The mince pies were golden and dripping with cream
She gave one to Sniffy, then let out a scream
For poor Sniffy's nose had turned purple, you see
He'd dipped it in ink, oh he was so naughty.
"Now Santa won't come if you're not a good boy
There won't be a present, not one single toy".
So drink this hot chocolate, smile and be good
And just you behave like a true Dragon should.
So Sniffy sat down and he dozed for a while
Whilst dreaming of Christmas, he wore a big smile
The whole room lit up and a voice called, "Hello"
And there stood a reindeer, covered in snow.
He nuzzled at Sniffy and gave him a lick
"Now you choose a present, come on, take your pick"
He saw a new apron that Mummy would like
Now should he choose that or perhaps a new bike?
He picked up the apron for he'd made his choice
"Now you are an Angel", said a jolly voice
For you are not selfish, you chose with your heart
So we will share Christmas before I depart.
I'm sure you will see it as I set the scene
To share Sniffy's Christmas the best there had been
He'd thought first of Mummy, the one he loved best
Rewarded by Santa with his treasure chest.
A contest entry
- TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 12,000) - Part 2 Children's by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended December 12, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Many congratulations on your HM in our contest, a worthy winner.
Please join in the remainder of the contests in our Rhyming Extravaganza.
Again congratulations, Sue and Jeff
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This is a great little christmas story It has great flow to it to, Good luck in this contest. Keep up the great work
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Love this Ros, great rhyming and such a lovely story too with a great message for children. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks a lot.So pleased you lked this, Ros
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A really cute write
about Sniffy the dragon,
maybe this Christmas
Santa will bring him a wagon.
Great rhythm and rhyme! best of luck in this contest.
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A pleasure to read, this rhymed so well. It fits in with the holiday theme. A Christmas dragon give the work a little zest.
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awww this is really cute and it flows very well. I enjoyed reading it. Best of luck in the contest.
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sweet
cute and a very nice write for the prompt . . good story line . . like "Whilst dreaming of Christmas, he gave a big smile" and "For you are not selfish, you chose with your heart" . . good ending . . inspirational . .
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Thanks for your comments and clappies.Much appreciated, Ros
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VERY good. Little suggestions; maybe wore a big smile
rather than gave a big smile. You need a space between the
comma after selfish and you. Third line, sixth stanza.
I really like the flow and the rhyme format.
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Thankyou very much for your comments and clappies, Ros
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Now this is what I call rhyming.
I never thought of Santa in rhyme, but you nailed it.
And there is a hidden message, who knew that to be unselfish could bring rewards, guess you did.
Good job.
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Thankyou so much for your comments, Ros
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Marvin says he is very pleased to see a dragon in the contest!
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Yes, it wouldn't quite be Christmas without a Dragon in my home, Ros
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Love it
So sweet and so heartfelt I really loved it and I thnk my son would too. (He is 5) I could see this story repeated for a few years.
great write. This little dragon makes me want to give him a BIG 
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It is so good to know that your son will enjoy the poem.Thankyou for your comments, Ros
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Absolutely perfect.
This is such a well thought out Christmas poem for children as well as all of us who are children at heart. Your rhyme is perfect and I loved the imagery in all of this. Your message is of the best kind, teaching children that it is better to give than to recieve. What a wonderful poem .I just loved all of this poem and best of luck in this contest I think you have a wonderful chance for an award.
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Thankyou for your most generous comments.Yes, I feel in these days of greed it is good to remember we can get so much more pleasure from giving, Ros
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What a wonderful piece the rhyme is perfect ( not something I see to often) it read through without any stumbling Excellent all the best in the contest
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Thankyou, So pleased you enjoyed this.As you know, I do love my Dragons, Ros
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