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“Discovered”

I am eaten alive
By the monsters of life
Cutting thorough my skin
Helping the knife

Leave me alone
You see,
I’m not who you thought
The puppet like pawn
That you secretly sought

I’m fighting the power
But it’s bringing me down
Cutting and stealing all that I’ve found

A contest entry

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  • xTomorrowx
    December 8, 2007

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    I like it, it has a strong rhyme, a good message within it, mainly it's a good write...
    I like it, great write, well written, thanks for entering and best of luck! =)