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Changeling

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Excerpt from Eos, vol iii; verse 3025 -  3055 William speaks of this irresistible urge for brutality, the type which is 

actively seeking justice, a justice which with this mind over matter situation whether  to kill himself or.., 

let the devils do it for him. 

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How distraught is the unpredictable?
Weeping in the shallows of self pity
Openly aware to states of powerless,
Tiny whispers tormenting my soul.

I listen from within that goad me on,
And for no reason why I comprehend,
Visions seen as though the devils own
This overwhelming inability of mine.
I seek for nowhere found as I presume
The panic stricken riles that in a way,
Perform those manic acts of one disclosure
Censuring my space, who share my room.

And deep inside the mind of understood,
Inherits all that evil-dwellers choose
Are so insistent letting devils loose
An owner who has introduced 'his' brood.

Defying natures ways, and so uncouth,
The legacy from sequels further find
A legend that has in effect spoke truth,
Them telling me again, that so remind,  
My having been accused of fate self sown.

I exercise this rite of talisman,
Whose lead and prime examples when alone
Are solving what it is, I have in mind,
Who blows my own that now extinguish it.
And rids himself the soul of gross disdain
Unequalled, unsurpassed, the ritual seems
As if for numbness sake I felt no pain
Completely void of disappearing dreams,
Journeying these life and death extremes.

Author notes

The key to the poem is in the following,

"And deep inside the mind of understood,
Inherits all that evil-dwellers choose
Are so accused of letting devils loose
An owner who has introduced 'his' brood.

Here we see the word, 'understood' as anyone's. It is this which enables us to go one way or the other, and not always suicide, this is decision making in general. These sprite are impish, but depending how severe, then maybe, a simple drowning of sorrows is all that is needed to calm them down, not death!

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  • CherryOnTop
    December 9, 2007
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    Intense and deep. Well penned. Visual is astounding.really gives one something to think about.


  • Starnova
    December 4, 2007

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    wow, this is really good. i love how it flows. so smoothly your eyes follow each word like a stream. it has a nice theme and very poetic


  • kirbyboo
    December 3, 2007
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    This poem is the dope man itz off the shizzy, weezy, peezy.


  • rite
    December 1, 2007

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    The perception of the concept of free will is conjured inside a realm restricted by conditionings. Minds trapped in the set of dimensions limiting perception are owned lock stock and barrel by the iniquitous sprites that drive this realm to its doom. The illusion of free will suffices to control them entirely and through them the structures and mechanisms in this world. We are less than the width of a hair away from really being free, from knowing what matters to be willed, but in our present state we are nothing but remote controlled drones who fanatically prepare their own ruin. It requires a divine act to break away from voluntarily being en prisoned, blinded to the schemes of dark powers and deaf to the whispers of powers that have true Love for us. Thank you for creating and sharing this magnificent work and good luck in the contest. Take care,

    Chris

  • Gott ist tot
    December 1, 2007

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    Good piece, good luck. I like how you started with a question- that's a good technique as it makes the reader think from the beginning. This poem had a sense of invasion despite it being a 'personal' illness. This is good as it challenges the idea that suicide is self induced. 'Tiny whispers tormenting my soul' made me think it was a little thing that started off something big.


  • AnAcousticEvil
    December 1, 2007

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    great

    personally one of my favorite poems so far, a deeply psychological poem, and i love how you change up rhyming patterns.

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