o∙kay – adjective, adverb, injunction, verb, noun
1. Lie of Omission
2. Misrepresentation
3. Accepted Social Response
In society we say ‘okay’ and are thus rendered acceptable.
example: It is okay to disobey the Lord’s Law so long as it’s trivial.
Author notes
Well when I wrote this I had the ability of different fonts, written without the bolds and italics it seems to look less like a dictionary definition, but I ain't paying money for those on here.
The idea from this came from a discussion about socially expected lies I had with a friend.
I'm trying to find a way to draw slightly more attention to possible multiple meanings of trivial, the last line was the best I could come up with and I don't think it works. Suggestions please.
k8fairy
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Very unique poem you've written here, and the message is loud and clear not to mention well put and intelligent.Great work and thank you for entering.
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surpising!
...and original.
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I think you judge the whole world when you only have a sliver of a glimpse at it. The term "okay" can mean "okay". You cannot say that whenever that word is pronounced that it is a solid lie, because sometimes it is honest.
open a wider view.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
Merry Christmas!
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It wasn't meant to be a judgment on every use of that word, more a commentary on how people often use small white lies in social situations. How do you think I can make it more broad since it appears that you have only picked up a narrow meaning, how do you think I can convey better my intention?
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Try to incorporate that it is not always used in a lie. I'm not really sure how, you just need to convey that the word is not always a lie.
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very clever. very clever.
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Very interesting, and fun.
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Unique...I like unique
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I'm not sure I understand this at all. It really confuses me. Hm... I like your way of writing it, making it look like a description from a dictionary, but other than that, I'm not sure what to get from it.
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Very good made me think! I love that! Nicely done, good luck.
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You're wright...
Such powerful words...
Describing to the "T" of where society has brought thee.
Great write!
Lo-Amo!!
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This really makes the reader think. We just talk and not realize most of the time what we are saying. Us humans tend to just pick things up and go with it. I really liked this a lot. Thanks for sharing.
Soulful Woman
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I thought this was very cleverly
written and found it intriguing, even refreshing to
rebel against structures.
You used just the right amount of words and fascination
to pull us in to see what is this all about...
and that last stanza..since we are world wide you could
of course keep it..or say spiritual or heaven..nirvana..
or just leave it and let them fill in the blanks.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
YOu may want to look at HAIKU...it would be flowing
and powerful in Haiku format too...suggest POET
Endeavor you could read his examples and follow the
formats, especially if you like the open form, and
the impact of your message.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) i liked it a lot! bit of a rebel
still inside me. (not to worry I use a leash!)
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thanks, I might check that out. I was considering using something broader isn't of lord (since I am actually not christian or really religous at all) but I wasn't sure it would have the same impact, since she does seem to be very rulely and the other religons seem (on the whole) less so.
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Wow...the last line cracks me up, it's so witty and oh, I LOVE IT!
Finally, a poem I coulf read for days and still find new ways to understand it's meaning...oh, I'm faving (new word)
I like the title too...intriguing...
~Hippie
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That was what I was trying to do with this poem, fit in as many thinkings as I could.
I made the title because someone once sent me an email with the subject line 'how was your day?' and that was it so I sent this title and then in the writing put 'okay'.
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