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It’s All Pink On the Inside

as I gently part you
giving a sniff, then
a flick of the tongue
and, ummm…rapture.

I take my time because
that excites me
causing my mouth
to salivate

as passion
gives way to
reckless abandon

and your scent I fear

weakens my faith
in the ability to
ever tell you
no.

Yes, you are my
guilty pleasure,











oh succulent 

marshmallow
Valentine Peep.

Author notes

This may be a little adjective heavy, but I think it's quite clever nonetheless and, perhaps rather adult themed, depending on where your mind wanders.

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  • tarcus
    May 8, 2008

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    The trouble is this is a FUNNY poems contest as in FUNNY HA HA. and yes my mind did wander so sorry.


  • Hemptress Medea
    May 8, 2008

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    lol...that was funny. I love the many spaces until you got to the valetine peep part...that was clever. You have a very interesting way of writing. :-D Good Luck!


  • pappacass
    May 8, 2008
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    awesome

    my mind did wander..lol
    great job..best of luck in this contest


  • Little Miss Mental
    May 8, 2008

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    Wow, that was good, i enjoyed this. Love the last few lines, valentine peep was great!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Phew! Well gosh... I'm not going to even say where my mind was going!!!

    I knew it was about a Peep all along really! lol

    *cough*

    Love it!


  • Emile
    December 12, 2007

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    Good

    I love your humor. A light dusting of the funny bone. This is a spirited piece that deals with a man's desire for sweet treats. You have fun with this piece from start to finish and it brings a smile to my day.


  • di ivers
    December 10, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry...I enjoyed the read...at first I was about to stop reading because I thought it was some type of erotica but I'm glad I kept reading....again thank you and good luck...

    ~~DI~~


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    December 10, 2007

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    Awesome!

    Humor with a Hitchcock twist!! Now, that's unique(ability)... Uh, oh... well the dictionary could use some new words... oh, me

    P.S. I thought it was going to be a strawberry


  • Cat gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    i love marshmallow peeps

    and your new picture circa__?

    and you are right.. this is very clever.

    glad to find you here...

    m

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 5, 2007

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    hahahahha

    I read this once before, and forgot about the punchline at the end this second time. SO dirty. Who knew peeps could be this naughty

    Fun entry, good luck.




  • LittleMoon silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    Brilliant, a marshmallow indeed. I notice how it is all of us women who have been taken in by this. Ha Ha I wonder why? A cleaver play on words.

  • michaeline
    December 3, 2007
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    You described the color well.A very adult theme until the end.Very cleaver.You are very talanted.


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 2, 2007
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    i will never ever quite
    look at a Peep the same
    way again....Thank you
    very much.

    Lane


  • daviscth
    December 1, 2007
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    LOL!!!!! I think you got us all with this one. I started reading, then I'm like.. hold on, he writes this kind of stuff??? You done an amazing job with this. I'll have to enjoy this one time after time. It's being bookmarked for sure!!
    good luck in the contest. Love ya, Cathy

  • goalsv
    December 1, 2007
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    Wooo! Wasn't sure were this was going at first. Need to wash my mind I guess. Very cleaver anyway!


  • RuthKephart
    December 1, 2007
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    ROTFL.......let me said, you had me on this one. Too, too funny
    Ruth

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