Society is a shoe
every one wants to wear
but does not fit anyone
as it is 'one' designed for everyone.
One who falls into it
ejected out
every one is a loner
trying to fit into society.
It is a flame
that dispels concentric dimness
but vast darkness
borders around it.
Society pinches
for one who toes its line
keeps people within its bounds
gives a sense of security.
Society has its own laws
unlike a natural thing
that can be bent by powerful
to exploit meek and pliable.
Author notes
Society gives security, robs creativity and freedom.
A contest entry
- BEAUTIFUL life changing, powerful and thought provoking. by SeptemberFaith.
450 points, ended December 23, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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Very creative metaphors, interesting idea to tie society to the characteristics of shoes. I would like to see this expanded, it is a great piece.
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I really disagree with you. Society doesnt rob creativity and freedom. Atleast, I dont think it does. I also think your metephor wasnt really well developed and probably could have been more powerful if developed more.
Cris -
This is a wonderful poem. Your message is loud and clear and I believe so much in what you say. Society does give security, but it does rob us of so many things. We all seem to conform to things that seem the right thing to do, but I dont believe in so many things about society. Well done, this is a truly thought provoking poem. Well done and best of luck for the contest.
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Indvidualiy is lost in society!
From birth to death society defines rules and makes one dependent and slave minded.you have very rightly compared society to a she dear Venu! excellent idea you got!
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