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His Killings

1,2,3
And your dead.
Victims of his dangerous deeds.
Hear his evil screams,
As they coil and die in pain.
Fear in their eyes, all will soon be forgotten.
None who have seen his face,
Live to tell the tale of his shameful disgrace.
Cry and plea as you may,
Know he will kill you without dismay.
First he finds his target,
Carefully observing them.
When the time is right,
He knows your every weakness.
He even gets your own friends against you.
No one to turn to, no one left to comfort you.
All you have his him,
His perfect lies of insanity.
Until he turns against you,
And kills for his mere pleasure.
The ghostly haunting of other victims,
Warn all those potential victims.
But none will heed their warning,
And fall under the curse of death,
Feeding off all their energy,
Their souls trapped forever.
No freedom from the permanent torture.
The never ending pain of their death,
Warns us all to beware of him.
If only you are opened to it.
If not, then your soul will die,
Like so many others before.

Author notes

umm well it's suppose to be him killing the souls of people as well as their bodies... if that makes sense... anyhow i hope you liked it.

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  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    Hmmm... It has it's moments, but I feel that it lacks passion. In line 2 'your' should be 'you're', and in lines 22-23, using the word 'warning' twice almost disrupts the flow here. Anyway, thank you for entering, and good luck!

  • DyingWish
    January 22, 2008
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    THIS IS EFFING SCARY.


  • fragglerock
    December 8, 2007

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    love the twist of the serial killer being the one person left to turn to unknowingly best of luck!


  • XxToxicBeautyxX
    December 2, 2007

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    Well this is a really good write, it has good imagery, GREAT rhyming and also a really good flow to it. You have great talent, Keep writing and I wish you good luck in this contest!!!


  • speakno3vil
    November 30, 2007

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    i like this one, the part about turning people against you sounds like some of the people down here in bumfuck tennesee. keep up the good work.

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