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Them Stupids

Don't gave I you silly corrective
Your condescendingly laugh
Of course I'm able to grammar
Me really don't thought I that daft.

Don't tried to teacher no english
Understandable perfect me!
What foolish inventing these grammar?
Them stupids obviously!

Author notes

I thought I'd challenge myself with this because normally I'm a bit of an obsessor over correct english. I considered writing a much larger poem, starting with only a few mistakes and ending with something close to jibberish. But if I get good feedback for this (and not too many death threats )I can always write another poem. Also, can anyone tell me if this is satire or just normal humor? I still can never tell...

I actually just won a big contest, and now this poem is getting published ^^ So exciting!

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  • badnovocaine
    January 16

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    OHHHHHHH This is hilarious. You have nothing to apologize for.

    Kudos for you.


  • james119
    February 15, 2008

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    I said a smile, not a laugh.

    Grammar alert!!! it's: Them obviously stupids.
    This reminds me of my struggles learning sign language.
    That different grammar has.


  • MourningSun
    January 9, 2008

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    I loved that..... I mean, Loved that I. Okay, your better at it than me. anyway, great job. That was sun to read, i loved it so much, i interrupted everyone else's work to read it to them. They liked it too.

  • Korarnithlas
    November 30, 2007

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    *Laughs* This poem was great and fun to read aloud.

    The only line which I believe sounds awkward would be the second line in the second stanza. I recommend reciting it aloud; you seem to be missing a syllable, specifically towards the end of that line.

    To clear up definitions,

    Satire: witty language used to convey insults or scorn

    Humor: (the definition you're probably thinking of) a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter

    Keep up the great work!

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