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Still (Senryu)

In my heart I know
You will not return to me,
But still I shall wait.

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I wrote this at lunch; I was in the mood for a haiku, and this is what came to me.

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  • always feel pretty
    November 30, 2007

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    awww. i L♥VE this! I really, really do. It's so short, sweet and simple. Absolutely perfect. Totally flows well.



    i loooovvveee iitttt.

    erica♥xoxo

    ♥
    ps.
    I can totally see a girl just standing there, staring off into space, thinking of him--and he'd be off somewhere else, not thinking of her. I can see the entire story behind this--and you made me see the story in three lines. How amazing is that? (Pretty amazing. *nods*)