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Heartbroken

heartbroken is me
I see the way he looks at she
This so sad and gloomy
It must be

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  • supergirl2797
    February 3, 2008
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    i like this one the best


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    December 7, 2007

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    This is a good piece, the only part I would work on a bit is the 2nd line "at she" isn't really good grammar but I get your meaning. A good effort and a lovely but sad poem.

  • supergirl2797
    December 1, 2007
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    ummmm...