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I'm Drowning in Death

I couldn't help myself, I cried last night
Fearing for myself, dying of fright.
I'm drowning in death,
Suffering of failing health.
I'm dying again, going under,
Drowning you, ripped asunder.
Cannot help myself, you still hold a piece of me,
So tired of being free.
Supressed by fear and pain,
Time cannot erase my sorrow again.
I held your hand as I faded into black,
From death there is no coming back.
I was captivated by your resonating light,
You died and I cried last night.
When I cried, you wiped away my tears,
Comforted me and banished my fears.
I've been alone for so long,
Singing a sorrow-filled song.
when I screamed, you fought away my demons,
I used you as a shield for selfish reasons.
Look here it goes, it never was, it never will be,

You don't know how you betrayed me.

I know the truth now, I know now who you are,

Without your help I'll never go far.

I'm drowning in Death,

As I fade, I lose my thoughts with my last breath.

 

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  • Sinnastarr silver member
    December 23, 2007

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    This was a good read. You portrayed your thoughts quite well. You painted a vivid picture with your words.
    All and all, a very good contest entry.
    Well done.
    Thank you so much for entering and I wish you the best of luck.


  • Sarrah Chang
    December 20, 2007
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    All in all this was a well writtien poem. Though the part
    I'm drowning in death,
    Suffering of failing health.
    To me does not rhyme very well. It kind of stopped the flow at the beginng which kinda hurts the rythme of the poem. But once you get past that the flow continues beautifully. Great jo


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    November 30, 2007

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    Wow this is a very good poem its so sorrow filled and sad and filled with such a passionate yet sorrow filled loved Great Job!