Violent actions
Deadly thoughts
Runaway
Teenagers come
Black and red
And bloody spikes
Runaway
Teenagers come
Love them
Hate them
Fear them
Kill them
Runaway
Teenagers come
Author notes
My chemical romance - Teenagers
A contest entry
- Options!! Teen Angst.. Teenagers Only Please by TheAshtrayGirl.
600 points, ended December 10, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies to Gold (or silver or bronze) by whispernthedark.
440 points, ended February 2, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? Constructive critics please.
Comments
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Mreow? Nice emphasis with the short lines but a few more words would be something I would love. The repition, probably done naturally by you adds a wonderful touch as well.
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Quite the interesting write, darling. Really just enchanting. This poem makes you stop and think, and the repitition only adds to it. Lovely, darling.
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