It’s been two weeks
since
my words played scrabble
with disease.
Since each breath smelled of
bad habit.
Fourteen days since my syllables spit
nicotine,
since my lips puckered and each crease
aged as I spoke.
336 hours since my lungs were suffocated
with cellophane,
since every inhale choked on reality
and every exhale released
my stress.
20,160 minutes since my fingers huddled
around the fire
since my thoughts went up
in smoke.
But only one second since I’ve
craved
.......a cigarette.
Author notes
"Habit is stronger than reason."
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"Smoking is one of the leading causes of statistics"
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"If not quitting for myself, I shall quit for the little life that would be lost without his mommy"
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Never have smoked, but can realte it to eating, and how one cannot stop when one has the urge to eat - takes mind control to quit, and real dedication. Perserverance - hang in there.
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Beautiful and Funny
It has been six years now for me. Hang in there hon. It gets easier. I promise. Plus the reward is a deeper understanding of the human condition. Your view of the world and your fellow human beings will change. It is very interesting and the beginning of a new and more independent life. ~May the Goddess and God BLess You, Peace, Gar~ -
Love your poem...and I am not a smoker! Very well-written.
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Thank you for reading
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I've been soo busy lately. I'm so proud of you for quiitting. Just remember, every puff winds the clock of death forward. If you every doubt yourself, just look in a mirror and say to yourself "I will not smoke" or something like that. Its all about coming into the realization of how nasty and horrid cigarettes are. Just keep going forward!
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Thanks, you are sweet, and very inspiring words, I have overcome this and I plan to keep it up, thanks for reading, hope you are doing well!
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good for you. this was a great write. i knew what you were talking about at the first stanza. but i loved how you waited until the last word to say cigarette. i read your page, and you must love your son very, very much. he's a very lucky boy, to have his mom, and to have his mom give up cigs for him. i know what dropping an addiction means, and i wish you a lot of luck. but yea, great write; loved it.
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Oh, thank you so much for your kind words, I really appreciate that and I am happy you enjoyed
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Ahh, so satisfying!
I have also recently quit, and thought about writing a goodbye poem to my American Spirit smokes. There are so many superb lines here it's hard to choose a favorite, but I think "Fingers huddled around the fire" is so great, especially as it's cold here now in Kansas--no more shivering in the smoker's hut. Good for us who are quitters!
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Well, COngrats to your quitting as well. Yes, I definetly do not miss freezing uotside just to take a few drags- keep it up, good luck
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...i quit smoking a few weeks ago...it's been like walking thru hell but with an angel by my side...what a struggle. i love the first line of this poem, layne. i think the entire poem itself is one a lot of people will identify with. bravo, my rhode island friend
Lane
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Well, congrats on quitting, glad you could relate to this one. Its a struggle yes, but something that needs to be done. Thanks for your comment
-Layne
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Oh, thank you so much for your kind words, I am so glad you enjoyed it. As hard as it was to quit, I am all done now! -
excellent my friend!
on both levels, the write(amazing as hell if all the numbers are accurate)and on stopping, which I'm sure has got to be tough!good write!
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Oh yes the numbers are accurate, had to look them up of course, and yes quitting is tough, but I am DONE!!!! Thanks for your comment
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This is an awsome piece! I love the references to the minutes and hours throughout the piece and then at the end you said it has only been a minute since you've craved a cigarette. Very clever! I can definately relate to this. Great job!
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Thanks, I am so glad you enjoyed it
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This was cool, I liked all the time references. The last line was awesome, except I hope the craving goes away soon
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Thanks Love, just glad I quit, the craving I can deal with
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