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Elizabeth

The girl that i love


You're the one that I love.
You walk past me with a push and a shove.
You treat me like dirt.
If only you knew how much that makes me hurt.
Living to see your beautiful smile,
Even if only once in a while.
Your boyfriends always treat you bad,
And that makes me really mad.
If I have to I will wait,
To show you that I will always treat you great.
My eyes light up when I see your sweet face,
For you I would go any place.
I would fight for you,
And pray that someday you would love me too.
If I could just hold your hand,
I would be the best boyfriend in the land.
Life would be better with me.
Just give me a chance, and you will see.

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  • Beating gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    this is a really sweet poem. The rhyming and rythm goes very well and without flaw. I like how I could almost see a guy standing alone and desiring the girl that's walking past. It's really sweet. Good job!


  • leave-me-2-bleed-
    November 30, 2007

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    wow

    o my gawd... this is beautiful, and for a beautiful girl! i hope you will eventually get your chance at proving your love to her.


  • Poetryistherapy
    November 30, 2007
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    awwwwwwww. loved it!

    but you need to reread the rules of my contest