(had to be cut in half for contest.half was taken down.sorry.)
i'm sorry for letting you go
there are things you don't know
neither of us left proof behind
sorry my stupidity kept you blind.
i'm sorry i'm practically a ghost
sorry that i loved you most
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Author notes
sorry this sucked.
sorry.
my option was to write dark...
yeah.
i tried to put six syllables in each line but it was really hard.
sorry.
A contest entry
- QUICKIE - Options 6 Lines 6 words/syllables per line... by Twisted Temptress.
333 points, ended December 5, 2007, 12 entries
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Comments
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Wow
this is good
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I hate counting syllables too,
but I love, Love this poem!!
Thank you for sharing
~Pastel
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At times like these,i feel like you're me.i envy your brain wave pattern.meep.i frickin love you,Phoenix
-Pixayyyyyy -
WELL GUESS WHAT,HON?
apology accepted =]
i <333 youuuu (now if only you weren't such a loooooser)
but you're my loserrr
and i'm sorry
hahahahahaha
no but seriously i liked the repitition
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yes, syllables ARE tricky to work with. This i good. You're welcome to post the other half but only these six lines will be marked, so you'd need to differentiate them... no matter. This doesn't suck, and it makes sense (rare sometimes) Good luck there, my dear.
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Thank you! well,the second half wasn't very good anyway.i would have a brain cramp trying to fix it,because this one was under construction anyway.Thank you,i was hoping it made sense =}
-Phoenixed
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I liked this poem.
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Obviously you needed to vent...That is good. Your anger is seen in every line. I hope you feel better now that you have let everything out.
Soulful Woman
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