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stocktake in chamber

 
 
 
 
 
In this quiet room of praise and counting coin,
a lady waits
with patience tucked behind his wall of bone.
 
She is part whore too- for every decent Eve is,


while, just like every-other-Adam, he twists
himself, wears a skeleton of need
as want, more ivory outside than in-
a shield of reason
warding thieves away from softer truth.
 
She takes a moral inventory from her shelf,
tallies stacks of memory in columns labelled
hope and fear.


A fire-sale, held in a two-dollar shop,

where everything is cheaper when lonely,


finds her worth more valued

than denial ever was.

 

 

 
she marks him down as surplus stock.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • Tirrell gold member
    December 19, 2007

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    A twist of irony, simply grand musings, as I have aforded a smile. Wonderful verses,,,


  • ardentMarch gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    A creative metaphor, expanded wonderfully, a finalist for sure...I love this one..thanks so much for entering my contest...


  • PageTurner
    December 2, 2007

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    I love your way with words...

    "She takes a moral inventory from her shelf,
    tallies stacks of memory in columns labelled
    hope and fear."

    With me, they become interchangeable.

    ~ Nicky♥


  • Cat gold member
    November 29, 2007

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    surplus stock-
    great line in context

    i do like how you've gone eve with this idea- not sure adam works - eve seems perfect though..

    good play on wall of bone..

    nice


  • Malabu
    November 29, 2007

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    im feeling like a little surplus stock after reading this brilliant poem..I once took stock of myself...decided to toss it to charity...an old whores home...loved your poem..doll
    Mal


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    November 29, 2007

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    the metaphor here is brilliant, Kate.

    Really a good poem..
    methinks this will have a shiny in the contest

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