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The Letter

The dog’s barking alludes to the mail
and you rush to the door heart in hand.
You hoped for a letter to arrive,
nervously twirling your wedding band.

The envelope holds a hint of musk,
instantly you flash to his parting.
Your tour of duty done, “why reenlist?”
you argued vainly, tears smarting.

Your heart's pounding in trepidation,
its rhythm fueling anxieties climb.
Angry words that foster bitter tears
melt away with the passage of time.

Opening the letter a smile appears,
joined by more as his words set them free.
Inked on this parchment from sandy dunes
a man in pain pens a heart felt plea.

Sorrowful feelings flow from the page
weeping and beautifully expressed.
Down in the deepest part of your being
you’re hurting and feeling depressed.

You devour every sweet nuance penned,
every succulent slice of candied hope.
Time is one thing you cannot defeat,
borrowing his strength you try to cope.

You kept a letter trimmed in black,
its typed message smeared in pools of tears.
“Killed in action by friendly fire,”
arrived yesterday, it feels like years.

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 30, 2008

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    Congratulations on reaching the final Emile with a very sad and touching poem that we both enjoyed.

    Please join us in the final contest of the series with two new writes, pre-writes will be DQ'd. We look forward to reading more excellent work from you.

    Sue and Jeff


  • Elenriel
    November 30, 2007

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    Oh my God! The ending...I feel tears coming. It is beautiful, Emile. it is an amazingly, beautifully, tragic poem. I cannot begin to describe the emotions that this poem sends through me. Beautiful, Emile. Simply beautiful.


  • LunaAmara
    November 29, 2007

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    this is breathtaking...
    well done. this work so well. i can understand and relate to the pain. good luck.


  • Darkend
    November 29, 2007

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    Wow...this poem leaves me quite speechless. Its so sad and I can feel the pain. The imagery and wording in this is so lovely and flowing. Well done. Please keep writing.