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Fireflies

Fireflies

 

Like winking stars in a dark upside down . . .

 

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Just thinking . . . .

Just a short piece--personal . . .

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  • ukelova
    March 17, 2008

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    Hello there. I like this piece very much. It is very evocative.

    It would work really well as a haiku:


    fireflies --
    winking stars upside down
    in the dark



    Have a gr8 day,
    BJ.


    • kvwriter silver member
      September 22
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      Sorry it took so long to respond!

      Thanks, BJ. I like how you turned this into a haiku. Hope you're having a great day too!--Kelly


  • last work of art
    March 14, 2008

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    .

  • lojol
    March 6, 2008
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    Never heard that one before. Its true they are like stars upside down.


    • kvwriter silver member
      March 6, 2008
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      Thank you so much, Reese! I'm glad you like my description of how I view fireflies.


  • IamthelostGBM
    March 2, 2008
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    kool

    I know i have those day to
    but you could add:
    Buzzing around to finish this lit sky

    • kvwriter silver member
      March 2, 2008

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      Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed my little write. My ever-present struggle with brevity. Lol.

      I enjoy your take on this world, life, love and more. Will be reading much more of you.

      Thank you again . . .

      Kelly


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    Don't think I have ever seen a firefly except in movies and on tv. Think it would be marvelous to have them all around you at night and seeing them flit here and there. Interesting look at them in these two lines.

  • Dolores
    January 18, 2008

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    perfect

    Thanks for the comment! I don't get around much on this site. I signed up to find out if there really were any poeple who could write at least decent poetry. And I was pretty disappointed at first. But eventually I was able to find a few people, like yourself, who weren't just shooting around in the dark. Thanks for giving me hope for the world!


  • Deke
    January 18, 2008
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    Think more!

    Think more! Then write more like this one; I like short ones, and this was/is a good one.
    Damon

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 3, 2007

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    I love this image.
    always was fascinated by fireflies, and this is just beautiful.

    I saw the sky
    and i saw stars too
    which hold special meaning for me these days.




  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    November 29, 2007
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    Im glad your thinking again...

    Sometimes it takes a thought of two and the waves of creativity begin to flow again.

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