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Deadly Addiction

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God, I am asking what's wrong with me?

I have a problem as you can see.

It's been my reality time and again

fighting this battle I never win.

  I can't change the past it always will be

and this addiction I have is hell to me.

I try to be good but it don't last to long

the cravings I feel dominate strong.

Shadowed by darkness no one else sees

they don't understand these ties holding me.

Is it worth living this torturous pain?

Got nothing to lose got nothing to gain.

My body is aching my soul needs a rest

my mind is screaming to get out of this mess.

There's no where to run to and no place to hide

this pain is all mine til the day that I die.

So, please take me now for I'm ready to go

release these chains I can no longer hold.

My serenity lies under a concrete stone

lay me in peace as I travel home.

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Written October 26th, 2003

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  • 6-Ft-UnDeR
    April 20, 2007

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    i am in love with this poem because i know how it feels to just want that pain to go away because you've tried everything to release yourself from the grip of something holding you so strong....i deffinately love this


  • SykoDj
    July 19, 2004
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    wow, great piece you expressed yourself so well in this piece as well as the other one that i read, anyways you also made very good word choices, and you made this piece flow extreamly well, over all, great job


  • teardrop gold member
    April 22, 2004
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    Jacki,
    Thank you for your wonderful reply!

    TD


  • Jacki D
    April 22, 2004
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    great

    i finally got to see more of your work and you rwrite great.wish i had your talent.


  • teardrop gold member
    December 23, 2003
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    Olivia,
    Thank you for your reply. This piece was writen in all sincerity.

    TD


  • pulsating
    December 23, 2003
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    I definitely can comply with this. The ambivalence of the hell. Someone to understand all the hardship. My brain is still healing and it is all I can do but be patient and wait. I have an appreciation for this deep and moving piece. Thank you for sharing it!~


  • Jason M Cooley
    November 28, 2003
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    EXCALLENT!!!!

    WOW...This is realy an excallent poem I love.This line especaily is hell to me.
    I try to be good
    but it don't last to long
    the cravings I feel
    dominate strong.

    this is true in so many ways.
    thanx for your comment..there was part 1 and 3 also there.
    thx again. Peace


  • MusycBoxx
    October 31, 2003
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    oo..i love these lines:

    So, please take me now
    for I'm ready to go
    release these chains
    I can no longer hold.
    My serenity lies
    under a concrete stone
    lay me in peace
    as I travel home.

    another great write! awesome job!

    ~ riki lynn ~


  • October 26, 2003
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    Wow.. I love this, it's amazing. I normally do not like rhyming, but this poem I exlude from that dislike, I love it. I'm not quite sure what the addiction is in this poem, but it's awesome just the same. Thank you for entering

    Kelsie


  • Sherry gold member
    October 26, 2003
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    Hope I made some sence? I dont know what it is your facing, doesnt sometimes that addiction seem like the band-aide to the scars....it brings to us that feeling of freedom but then like when where not in control it can sure seem to bother us......?

  • Sherry gold member
    October 26, 2003
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    Wow excellent piece, your pain and feelings of despire are well expressed, and wanting a way out and feeling trapped.....Your surrender is all the Lord wants...a willing heart....That you sound like you have done here....Sometimes pain keeps on in that addiction least you want out of it....That shows hope to me....You have trusted Him the Lord that can take whatever it is....Through Him you will have the courage to heal from this....and strength...usualy its deep pain that keeps one in the addiction....and it makes it hard to break free sometimes...The hardest thing is trust and letting go or trusting others to help one through it.....Great piece to your heart and surrendering and being willing to let go......That isn't easy sometimes I admire your heart for being willing to turn it over to Him...That shows a sweet Spirit for Jesus....to let go off that painful friend that helps you cope....and let Him in there to love you..... Sherry
    Edited on Oct 26, 1:59 p.m. because ''.

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